 remote disposal, rictameter [ REVISION #1 ] |
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 Jul 20 05, 07:38
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
QUOTE(Arnfinn @ July 20 2005, 07:56) Ha Daniel my Friend. First let me say a delightful piece.  Hmmm...Getting chilly  Do South in the globe O  and when you arrive there you must go UP to Do North.Because of polar magnetation + - you will allways be going one way or the other Baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaabee.   Reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeev up yo engines. HERE WE goooooooooooooooooooooooo  Good on Ya mate. Arnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnne the Fiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiin   It's always a joy to interchange with ArnFUN! Thank you so much for so well illustrating the now-too-belabored point of the poem. flyin' off east in my car to work ( Will it never end?! ), Lightly, Daniel 
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Jul 24 05, 11:05
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Daniel! :wave:
Another fab rictameter! My one suggestion for you to ponder: indefinitely . . . never end? How about" indefinitely . . . where they end? Great use of first and last line! ~Cleo :pharoah: ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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Jul 27 05, 08:04
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 19,923 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Thanks so much, Lori.
Though I cannot use your suggestion, since I think it would cloud the meaning, it DOES give me another perspective, so I think I'll answer the question posed, [ in REVISION #1, just posted ] which perhaps will make the example make more sense to future readers. At least I hope it will. deLighting in your attention to this detail, Daniel :sun: ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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