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Sekhmet
post Mar 7 09, 05:35
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Assassins


Spring loosens moist earth,

letting the sharpened leaf spears

stab the infant Sun


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Arnfinn
post Mar 7 09, 23:25
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Hello, Leo.


Assassin


Spring loosens moist earth,

letting the sharpened leaf spears

stab the infant Sun


Very imaginative nature story. Has a biblical, Moses, ring about the Bullrushes (son).

I notice there are a few spears involved. Should the title be Assassins


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post Mar 8 09, 03:49
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Hi John! You are absolutely right. Assassins it shall be.
Thanks, Leo


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post Mar 12 09, 17:33
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Hi Leo

I think you are getting the hang of these very quickly. I love this!!!! - and the surprise aha! in the last line is superb.

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post Mar 20 09, 15:56
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Leo, I missed this, but I thought it very well done, loved the play on words ending.
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