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Jun 27 09, 23:14
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Ornate Oracle
Group: Praetorian
Posts: 8,998
Joined: 27-August 04
From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia
Member No.: 78
Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:David Ting
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Hi Lori and All,
I would like to nominate Arnie's excellent poem 'Tunnel Vision' for August IBPC. His striking style and personal rhyme scheme, along with up-to-date hyphenating and line breaks, make it a highly worhty piece, in my opinion.
(I'm nominating it now, even tho' I intend to make one or two crits, because I'm always in a rush and I don't want this piece to slip by unnoticed)
Hugs, Syl***Tunnel Vision by John MacleodBobbing heads, eccentric, restive rustling feet and scintillating colours as people come and go. For most who walk are strangers and if friends do-chance to meet, it’s only scant acknowledgement to— so and so--. The dank darkened tunnel the rumble, the pound, and syncopating rattle from archway to the hall. With clear glass eyes the newborn hurtles from the womb unbound, and with red-hot brakes a’ screeching, welcomes one and all. Animated puppet dolls, sweat filled summer days, and suffocating carriages where luck fills empty seats. The unfriendly— unnoticed— stand in crowds of cramped malaise, their bodies tired and worn from the city and the streets. Wheels, slip metal brake shoes, slowly turn on rail as stimulated motors breathe out babbled blatherskite. Untethered, the silver train moves on down the chequered trail to vanish, as a ghost, with the spirits of the night.
This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Jul 12 09, 10:05
Reason for edit: Revised version posted
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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Jun 29 09, 06:41
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Creative Chieftain
Group: Centurion
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Joined: 9-August 03
From: Australia
Member No.: 17
Real Name: John
Writer of: Poetry
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G'day, Sylv, Hmm... Don't know what say... Xcept... Thank You, Amigo.YeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeHa. Well... I'm lost for words John
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Jun 29 09, 23:05
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Ornate Oracle
Group: Praetorian
Posts: 8,998
Joined: 27-August 04
From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia
Member No.: 78
Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:David Ting
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Dear Lori & all,
I would like to nominate Thoth's (Wally's) poem, Sickle Hand for August's IBPC. It's a poweful allegory of nature and lost love, with wonderful form & rhyme. It's charged with emotion that's defly handled in objective, poetical style.
Hugs to all, Syl***Sickle Hand by Walter SchwimShifting hopes like windblown sands form ordered rows of crescent moons, on which a scything wind expands her heart from un-touched drifting dunes. When twilight slowly stills the land, the angry wind abates its blast. I gently take her wanting hand and hold her warm and safe at last. Before the cautious morning beams paint red her perfect desert sky my briefest kiss intrudes her dreams to be repulsed with scant goodbye. Relentless wind blows through my mind and sweeps up every tender thought. My fading footprints left behind are fast eroded, leaving naught. I curse the those fickle pseudo moons that hold my empty arms at bay and curse the wind and crescent dunes that whisked my whispered kiss away. Favors shift like fickle sand to cover perfect lips un-kissed, extends for love her sickle hand, that with the dawn will be dismissed.
This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Jul 31 09, 17:34
Reason for edit: Revised
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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Jul 1 09, 18:17
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Mosaic Master
Group: Administrator
Posts: 18,892
Joined: 1-August 03
From: Massachusetts
Member No.: 2
Real Name: Lori Kanter
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Imhotep
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Excellent ! Permission PM sent...
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Jul 8 09, 06:43
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Mosaic Master
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From: Massachusetts
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
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Referred By:Imhotep
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I'd like to nominate Snow's poem, Sky Wars for the upcoming IBPC competition. I really enjoy reading her imagery of a storm and the metaphors she cleverly uses to describe the events. This deserves a larger audience. Good luck! ~Cleo Sky Wars by Eira NeedhamConflicting forces brace for battle, dressed in charcoal camouflage. Prepared to swarm the sky, they mobilize and fly abreast while nimbi squadrons activate the storm. Descending bombs crescendo; roaring booms provoke the sun to disengage his rays. Grenades explode, their flashes herald doom so startled creatures dart in disarray. Machine guns fire, barraging foes in bursts; torrential rains unleashed soon drench the land to quench the dehydrated flora’s thirst. New cirri squads arrive to take command, belligerence retreating. Peace pervades as sunrays rally; victory parades.
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Jul 12 09, 09:30
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I would like to nominate Sylvia's Poem, Bewitched for the IBPC for Aug or if it is too late then for Sept. I think this is a very powerful and erotic piece and deserves to be given a wider audience. Steve BEWITCHED by Sylvia MaclaganSummer air quivers. A butterfly unfurls its wings on my bare chest. I hunger for you. Picking blades of grass beside a river where I come to rest, desire arouses me to dazzling bliss. I lick ripples from your breasts, my body surfing unimagined heights from our together nights. Hummingbirds flirt with flowers. I feel the radiance of your kiss under silken bowers, intoxicated with jasmines’ fragrance. When night falls, will I have forgotten your love call among those whistling reeds, vibrations of infinite chords? I know moonlit willow-trees will tempt me to tarry awhile. I’ll succumb to sensual smiles in that glade beyond, where nymphs mirror their flesh on surfaces of serene ponds. Yet April fled.... Cool May moon! I grow old. I might lose my way among the sumptuous shapes of night. The essence of my life may be a dream. I’ll stoop like a cypress weighted with snow, scorned by moonbeams on mountain peaks. No! I’ll sip only from your fountain: one day it will whirl me to the ocean. I’ll make love to you with fevered heart, engage the teasing motion of your thighs, your impulsive lips. Yet now, until Morning Star departs, I’ll bask on the banks of alluring creeks. Note: Seasons of Southern Hemisphere. Copyright: Sylvia Evelyn, Buenos Aires, Argentina, 2009. All rights reserved.
This post has been edited by Cleo_Serapis: Jul 21 09, 05:43
Reason for edit: Revision
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Jul 29 09, 17:40
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Mosaic Master
Group: Administrator
Posts: 18,892
Joined: 1-August 03
From: Massachusetts
Member No.: 2
Real Name: Lori Kanter
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Imhotep
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Got your PM John - thanks mate. This poem will be sent next month for the September IBPC. Best of luck then - if you make any further revisions, please let me know! Cheers ~Cleo
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Jul 29 09, 19:09
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Group: Gold Member
Posts: 783
Joined: 24-July 07
From: South Africa
Member No.: 457
Real Name: Walter Schwim
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Mistral
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Thank you for the nom, I'm flattered! I have finally revised it. A big thanks to Liz for those excellent suggestions. Sickle Hand (Rev 1) Shifting hopes like windblown sands form ordered rows of crescent moons, on which a scything wind expands her heart from un-touched drifting dunes. When twilight slowly stills the land, the angry wind abates its blast. I gently take her wanting hand and hold her warm and safe at last. Before the cautious morning beams paint red her perfect desert sky my briefest kiss intrudes her dreams to be repulsed with scant goodbye. Relentless wind blows through my mind and sweeps up every tender thought. My fading footprints left behind are fast eroded, leaving naught. I curse the those fickle pseudo moons that hold my empty arms at bay and curse the wind and crescent dunes that whisked my whispered kiss away. Favors shift like fickle sand to cover perfect lips un-kissed, extends for love her sickle hand, that with the dawn will be dismissed.
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Jul 31 09, 17:34
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Mosaic Master
Group: Administrator
Posts: 18,892
Joined: 1-August 03
From: Massachusetts
Member No.: 2
Real Name: Lori Kanter
Writer of: Poetry & Prose
Referred By:Imhotep
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Got it! Thanks Larry and best of luck! ~Cleo
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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