Hi James,
Thought I'd drop by to admire your efforts. But you wish for comments, too?
Well, they are excellently executed minimalism (so glad I'm typing this and not trying to enunciate it, lol).
'A' is so wonderfully minimalist - shame that extra word had to go in.
'B' is really sensual for such a tiny piece.
At first glance the word 'embedded' in B feels wrong; flowers are not embedded (except in those beautiful paper weights). How about 'clinging to', 'verging on', 'springing from'? Just some thoughts sprinkled like wayside flowers - to pick or leave for the weedkiller.
Cheers, Fran
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