 Moonstruck Fireweed (broken Spenserian Sonnet) |
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 Oct 26 08, 13:05
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Moonstruck Fireweed
I - Dawn Empty quietude - - (elegant flowers Sweep in renewal as the fire-river Bleeds from the glaciers) cold dewdrop showers Cleanse the awakening - - purple flames shiver II - Afternoon Mountain-breath exhales from the peaks and quiver Beneath the valleys - - Flames burst in their rite! (Eternity burns in purple slivers) - - Sun loathes such a beauty! Embodied height! III - Moonstruck Sleepy flowers - - milking the purple night Of blackness and starlight of the calm-tude (A faint fire glows, ember of sunlight Emerges from the rest of Moon’s interlude ) IV - Epilogue Dawn is drunk, and the full moon is waned - - Amongst darkness a purple flame remained |
  
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Nov 21 08, 17:22
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
Hi Colors,
I am not familiar with the Spenserian Sonnet, but this is beautiful! Rich in imagery with wonderful timing. Very nice! ·······  ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Nov 23 08, 11:22
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
i also enjoyed this poem very much!
 I think my favorite are these: Eternity burns in purple slivers - - A faint fire glows, ember of sunlight Emerges from the rest of Moon’s interlude Im ight have to try this layout - very creative! I enjoyed the read, ~Cleo 
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