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RC James
post Dec 17 15, 09:17
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Greetings arrive on gossamer wings
the bright length of the day at hand
breath -- a birth -- joy within us sings
round a parlor tree -- the piano grand.

Oh how I wish -- and wish on it again
the lord himself on this his natal day --
ah so many lonely centuries it’s been --
would return in the jolly man’s sleigh.
 
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post Dec 17 15, 09:52
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Hey, Richard...

I was drawn in here by your Emily Dickenson title, though I was curious why the poem should be in this forum, since she wrote in rhyme and form...

and I was not disappointed in the flavor of this little piece. Emily would surely smile at this combining of the Lord's birth with Santa...

but I was right that this is posted in the wrong forum. I think you can expect Lori to arrive soon and move it to where it "belongs" since this is of course not free verse.

I loved the reading, Richard. Look forward to more.

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post Dec 17 15, 11:28
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Daniel - I placed it here because I paid no attention to meter as I was writing it, and assumed it was all off metrically, and attempted (that's the correct term, since you caught me up on it) to place it as free form rhyme. That's a hilarious little family anecdote. My grandfather used that term "you'll get the dickens" often. I wonder if it has anything to do with Charles D.?
Anyway, glad you approved of my Emily channeling. Regards, R
 
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post Dec 17 15, 19:25
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Oh I love this one! And yes - I will move it to the R&M forum and keep a link here so you can follow along. xmaswindow.gif

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~Cleo ornament.gif


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I love this one Richard!

I have no nits really - perhaps a few too many -- I appreciate they signify pauses. Perhaps just one -

Perhaps I'm only saying this as I always used to use double -- until someone told me single ones were better. Don't know!

Greetings arrive on gossamer wings
the bright length of the day at hand
breath -- a birth -- joy within us sings
round a parlor tree -- the piano grand.

Oh how I wish -- and wish on it again
the lord himself on this his natal day --
ah so many lonely centuries it’s been --
would return in the jolly man’s sleigh.


Please consider entering this in the Xmas Contest - closing date tomorrow.

Happy Xmas
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I love that first line - and even more so because some of the greetings at this time of year are very tenuous anyway, expressed because they are expected rather than because the person concerned really cares a jot.


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Hello Richard,

I missed out on this one. Lovely piece. Amusing to think of Jesus returning on Santa's sleigh!

I've read one of the gospels not included in the Bible, forget now, but may have been the one according to St. Tomas...not sure...which would be quite fitting for your poem. That gospel pictures Jesus as a cheerful boy, playful, even dancing with the crowd as a young man!

So he'd enjoy the sleigh ride, right?

A movie was made of that gospel, very original but not of the best. Never mind.

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G'day.


Enjoyable poem.

Well written...with a sleighbell beat.

And as you say...one never knows who arrives at ones doorstep.


Regards,

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