Hi Terry,
I don't normally post in this forum too often, especially with Haiku, only because I am extremely left in the dark with it. However, as I tumbled in here and read this I connected immediately on difference levels.
The first line, with the use of the word 'whispering' gave me an immediate sense of dark/covert or a lonesome feel, which is wonderfully turned by L3 with sunshine. This worked wonders for me.
It gave me a sense like the narrator is in a darkness or dark time and subconsciously (whisperings from a greater source of light/energy) is he/she confirmed that light/God/better times are right there...
Now I am not sure if this is anything of what was meant, but really comes through for me... sometimes, we associate an interpretation by our own state of mind or experiences in the past... I enjoyed this ... and haven't nits with this... just some interpretation and hopefully this will help you to see if your original intent is coming through.
Hugs, Liz
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