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 Dec 2 15, 20:41
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 Nomad  Posts: 8 Joined: 1-December 15 Member No.: 5,295 Real Name: David Writer of: Poetry  |
The Fires Within
My passions run wild they cannot be tamed, They go unused; no one's to blame. I burn down to my inner core, Can't hold back too much more. You inflame me like a demon from hell, My fires burn, but who's to tell. A fever rages, my eyes glaze, You are the cause of this blaze. My soul craves your entire essence, I tremble with your very presence. To touch or to tenderly caress, I hunger for you to slowly undress. I fear these passions will devour, The life within me, hour by hour. It is as if you have cast spells, My soul cries and my passion yells. Down into the fires I fall, Is this what it's like, is this all? I try not to think of wanting more, But these feelings I cannot ignore. Have fires ever burned uncontrolled in you, Leaving you not knowing what to do? I'm afraid the fires will forever burn, Never again knowing you, left to yearn. |
  
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Dec 7 15, 18:38
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi David
It's a pleasure to read your work again - just like old times. This is a lovely emotional/sensual poem. Nice end rhymes too. As you write in Rhyme your poetry would fit nicely into the R&M forum Herme's. I hope we will be reading more from you soon. Eira (Capricorn from Poem Kingdom) ·······  ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner            |
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Dec 7 15, 20:58
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Nomad Posts: 8 Joined: 1-December 15 Member No.: 5,295 Real Name: David Writer of: Poetry |
Eisa it's great to meet you again. Thanks for the reply and nice words.
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Dec 8 15, 18:38
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hello David,
 What a sensual poem containing smooth rhythms. I think my favorite stanza is this: Down into the fires I fall, Is this what it's like, is this all? I try not to think of wanting more, But these feelings I cannot ignore. I've enjoyed this read.  Cheers, ~Cleo 
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Dec 9 15, 09:24
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Nomad Posts: 8 Joined: 1-December 15 Member No.: 5,295 Real Name: David Writer of: Poetry |
Thank you Cleo I appreciate your words.
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