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Sep 3 03, 17:36
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Very nicely said Brahms! :pharoah2
I've made the changes you requested, so please let me know if there's anything I missed, ok?
What a nice prayer piece this is!
BIG HUGAROOOOOOS! ~Cleo :cloud9: :pharoah:
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Sep 3 03, 15:18
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Give me the strength to rise above my bed where I've chosen to sleep.
Give me the will to go on when I can't find a path to go back.
Give me the wisdom that I may recall what I have been and understand that which I do not know.
Give me the guidance to love and care for those in my classes when I've chosen to be quiet.
Give me the endurance to unlock, let go of all my frustrated moments; to stand as a small tree ready to accept your rain, cool but soothing and your sun, light and showing expecting to grow.
Give me the courage for those I can meet and touch to say what my heart truly longs as Lord Bukley did say; "Gentlemen, M'Ladies, Would it bother you much If I told you I love you?"
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Sep 3 03, 18:39
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Ahh, Cleo, you are like one of the surgeons who wove me back to life! The only change, which in attempting may have allowed the bugaro -I wish the last three lines indented 3 spaces right from the edge.
A better title that makes more sense to me is you are like the fellow crew who pulls lines truly and so the sailboat I travel runs true.
Ahoy C'aptn, Brahms
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Sep 5 03, 16:54
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QUOTE (Brahms @ Sep. 03 2003, 15:18) Give me the strength to rise above my bed where I've chosen to sleep.
Give me the will to go on when I can't find a path to go back.
Give me the wisdom that I may recall what I have been and understand that which I do not know.
Give me the guidance to love and care for those in my classes when I've chosen to be quiet.
Give me the endurance to unlock, let go of all my frustrated moments; to stand as a small tree ready to accept your rain, cool but soothing and your sun, light and showing expecting to grow.
Give me the courage for those I can meet and touch to say what my heart truly longs as Lord Bukley did say; "Gentlemen, M'Ladies, Would it bother you much If I told you I love you?" Hi Brahms
This is a truly beautiful piece that has warmed my heart I feel if I said these words at the beginning of every day, it would give me a good start
Thankyou for sharing this with us. :pharoah2 Eisa/Snow
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Sep 10 03, 00:12
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Thanks, Eisa. This poem was written a couple years after I woke from the coma, and I began life again like a simplistic child during my late 20's. Specific to these days was simple joy and simple tiring moments when I could not operate with complexity So I did not feel legitimate enough using capitals and despite all that, there was plain essence, eh?
Wishing the ease of silence, Brahms
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Oct 25 03, 04:14
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god grant me the serenity to accept... and so on serious undertone good poem and you will be loved
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Jan 29 04, 17:04
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