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> Times Ten for 18 February 2017, FOLLOW THAT DREAM
Maureen
post Feb 23 17, 01:51
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FOLLOW THAT DREAM ... Maureen Clifford © The #ScribblyBark Poet

I saw a star and followed it
its sparkle drew me on.
I wore a mask so none would see
behind it - hope had gone.
Love stole my heart I recollect
I paid the tax and more
to free myself from purgatory...
I had been there before
but thought this would be different.
What a fool I was for sure;
must have been drunk on Burgundy.
No champagne - did I pour.
The first time I was twenty
we were both joined at the hip.
The last time I was sixty
and I thought 'twould be a snip
to share life and love together
an adventure it would be.
I was wrong, and once more wear the mask.
I'll share no more of me.

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JustDaniel
post Feb 23 17, 05:58
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Dear Maureen:

Here is my response to your response, utilizing the words star love stole tax recollect Burgundy snip twenty mask sparkle


The Stupefied Stalker

I saw you there and followed you
while following that star;
I had to when I saw your mask
and wondered who you are.
I felt your love; it stole my heart;
I recollect no tax
but tasted Burgundy, I think
and wished you would relax.
I sensed some struggle you were having
somewhere deep inside;
you started talking to yourself
about some things you hide.
Though I could only catch a snip
from words that happened out:
when you were twenty-one or so
some surety turned to doubt
and purgatory sucked you in.
I'll have that fire no more!
Yet now you chance to love again
and open up that door.
I see you taking off your mask;
the sparkle in your eyes
would match the light of any star
that twinkles in the skies.
Then suddenly... the mask again.
what happened to you there?
I didn't have a chance to meet
you; now I weep and stare.

© MLee Dickens'son

deLighting in your fresh work, my friend...

Daniel sun.gif


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Cleo_Serapis
post Feb 23 17, 15:29
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I absolutely love this response, Maureen. I felt a personal connection and that heightened my senses. I love the rhythmic quality of heptameter, even when split.

Take off the mask!
Cheers,
~Cleo Pharoah.gif


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post Feb 24 17, 07:05
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Maureen,
I enjoyed how you used the word mask. It was a smooth read and it took us on a journey through your main character's lifetime.

Well done,
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post Feb 25 17, 10:26
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Hey Maureen,

So nice to read you once more and to see you at MM. Such a delightful read although somewhat sad. Hope this wasn't from your lifetime.

Come back more often and join in the fun.

Larry


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