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Aug 16 03, 16:53
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I have recently revised this as `Earth's Ovation'
Earth’s Ovation
Now birds wing home to chirrup sweet refrains arousing earth from sleep, while she abstains from frigid life, in winter’s drowsy pause; their springtime song precedes the land’s applause.
The daffodils careen on graceful stems, their verdant sleeves adorned with moistened gems. They blow their amber trumpets, raised erect to herald Spring’s arrival. She’s bedecked with luscious colours; meadow flowers sweep across the ground, where creatures wake from sleep. Old twigs expand to burst their dormant buds, as sun disperses warmth through winter’s blood.
The vibrant chorus echoes through the breeze; a vernal scene is set with expertise.
Earth awakes
As birds fly swiftly home to warble songs, all nature stirs to life once more and longs to shake off winter’s cold and sleepy break; Springtime is here at last and earth’s awake.
On swaying slender stems, exquisite leaves become the golden daffodils’ green sleeves. Their yellow trumpets raise to sweetly sing and boldly herald birth of verdant spring.
Twigs new and old burst out their dormant buds, while creatures stir awake as nature floods to greet the earth with life, refreshed from sleep; bright meadow flowers rise and shyly peep.
Warm sun shines through a softly blowing breeze as nature sets the scene with expertise.
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Aug 16 03, 20:25
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QUOTE (Eisa @ Aug. 16 2003, 17:53) Earth Awakes
As birds fly home to warble songs all nature stirs to life, and longs to shake off winter’s sleepy break. Springtime is here and earth’s awake.
On slender stems, exquisite leaves become the daffodils’ green sleeves. Their yellow trumpets raise to sing and herald birth of verdant spring.
Twigs new and old burst out their buds, while creatures wake and nature floods the earth with life, refreshed from sleep; bright meadow flowers start to peep.
The sun shines through a softened breeze to set the scene; I feel at ease. Just Lovely Eisa! I love the whole poem and your ending sings!
Thank you for being the first to psot in this forum. You've added a tile to the Mosaic in style!
Cheers! Cleo :pharoah2
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Aug 19 03, 08:10
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Aug 19 03, 16:48
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QUOTE (Athena @ Aug. 19 2003, 03:40) Heyyyyyy Snow! LOVE your poem! Do you live in Australia? South Africa? I'm sweltering here in intense summer heat and you're writing about beautiful spring! However, the poem is lovely and lyrical. I love meter and rhyme .. just wish I could write it better. Thanks for being the first poster in this forum! Lovely way to begin. Blessings, Athena/Dolly Hi Athena/ Dolly/ or Merri? (giggle)
Thanks for your lovely comments. I live in England and it has been pretty hot here this year too. I did write this awhile ago at the end of Spring
It is so good to chat to you again...we haven't for a long while Perhaps I'll see a bit more of you here?
Eisa/ Snow
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Aug 19 03, 16:55
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QUOTE (Aphrodite @ Aug. 19 2003, 08:10) Hello Eisa~ I thoroughly enjoyed your refreshing sonnet, as the imagery and lovely alliteration brings your poem to life. I especially like this stanza: On slender stems, exquisite leaves become the daffodils’ green sleeves. Their yellow trumpets raise to sing and herald birth of verdant spring.Very beautiful! In love~ Aphrodite Hi Aphrodite
Thank you again for your lovely comments
That 2nd stanza is my favoutite too and was the 1st I wrote at the start. I just wrote the rest around it
Thanks again Eisa
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Sep 4 03, 18:03
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Eisa, made happier reading your words and glad for your ease.
Brahms
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Sep 4 03, 18:08
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Your comfortable words fit and remind the same in any land, thank you for sharing this.
Brahms
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