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White Plaster, In memory of my beloved Dad~October 2, 2000 |
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Oct 2 09, 07:50
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You lie there, solid and firm, as onlookers gawk and comment on how good you turned out.
They did such a good job, they whisper, like white plaster thrown on hard walls, you just take it.
How you love to hold hands, but not your own, the Rosary Beads d r a p e loosely cross spindly fingers, like drops from tears cried dry.
In the bed you made, you lie cold, a hard box unlike the feathery soft mattress you once fell into.
Consumed by a lifelong toxic cloud, sucking in, you lie ravaged and still.
Oh, but for just one more breath of clean air.
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Oct 6 09, 09:03
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Lindi, This is so poignant on many levels. I'm soooo sorry that "the smoking life" consumed your father - but this is a spot-on expression of the coffin, i.e. bed he made - and the wish to have just one more breath of 'clean air'. This is one to make one think!!! HUGS ~Cleo
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Oct 8 09, 07:01
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Oct 6 09, 14:03 ) Lindi, This is so poignant on many levels. I'm soooo sorry that "the smoking life" consumed your father - but this is a spot-on expression of the coffin, i.e. bed he made - and the wish to have just one more breath of 'clean air'. This is one to make one think!!! HUGS ~Cleo Hi Lori, It is nice to be back! I have many poems about my Dad and how much I love and miss him. This one expresses my sadness and anger, that because of his addiction to cigarettes, I was robbed precious time with him. I appreciate your comments very much! Happy Autumn.
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Oct 8 09, 07:07
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Happy Autumn to you too Lindi! HUGS ~Cleo
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Oct 9 09, 09:37
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Thanks, Lori!
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Nov 4 09, 00:50
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Hello Aphro,
Addictions, no matter which one, are difficult creatures. I have friends and acquaintances who succumbed to alcohol, and accepting that takes a bit of doing sometimes.
Best
Merlin
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Nov 26 09, 19:49
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QUOTE (Merlin @ Nov 4 09, 06:50 ) Hello Aphro,
Addictions, no matter which one, are difficult creatures. I have friends and acquaintances who succumbed to alcohol, and accepting that takes a bit of doing sometimes.
Best
Merlin Hi Merlin, Thanks for commenting on my poem. It is very hard to watch someone you love fade away. I am sorry for your experience with this. Happy holidays to you. Lindi
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