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Nov 6 05, 23:55
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Hi, I'm not entirely sure I meet the requirements for this posting, since I have been an inactive member for some time. If this is in contravention of the rules, pls feel free to remove it - no hard feelings. I did a quick look over what I've got that's Xmasy, and this is about it. M
Tis the Season
A red-dyed sky is left behind – the sun has settled down behind a western ridge to close another day. Across the bridge are signs that Christmas season has begun. The evening sky is very soon outdone by bright-lit garlands strung on trees and homes, on shops and streetlamps, tall cathedral domes, and in the streets – by people on the run.
The countryside lies silent under snow; a sense of peace extends across the land beyond the bustle of the city’s crowds. When chores are done, a cowboy feels the glow of burning logs, then warms his outstretched hand as smoke curls slowly upwards to the clouds.
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Nov 7 05, 06:01
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Thank you for your Holiday entry! :holly:
Best of luck to you! :dove:
May the 'classic' holiday spirit be shared in your heart throughout the season! :blueorn:
~ Mosaic Musings Staff :knight: :pharoah: :viking: :vic: :troy: :roman: :cali: :tut: :knight:
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Nov 10 05, 02:59
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Good morning Eric,
A lovely contrast between the mayhem of Christmas Shopping and the peace and quiet of the countryside (which far more conveys the spirit of Christmas IMHO)
I live in a tiny village surrounded by farms and fields. It would be lovely to see them nestled under blankets of snow. We have had hardly any in the last ten years. Snow makes everything feel quiet and peaceful doesn't it?
Thanks for the read and good luck. :snowflake:
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Nov 10 05, 15:19
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Hi Merlin
An interesting look at the contrast between the artificiality and bustle of the city and nature and peacefulness in the countryside.
Good luck in the competition.
Nina
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Nov 12 05, 20:05
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Ahhh, Christmas away from the comercialism. A really peaceful poem to read.... Marcia
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"...We are born into the world like a blank canvas and every person that crosses our path takes up the brush and makes their mark upon our surface. So it is that we develop. But we must realize there comes a day that we must take up the brush and finish the work. For only we can determine if we are to be just another painting or a masterpiece..." 1981 Javan (from the book " Meet Me Halfway" ) MM Award Winner
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Nov 13 05, 00:51
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Hello Eric,
This is quite vivid, as if a painting- the senses are drawn into active partiicpation and the mind is quickened by the motion and emotion of the poem. I surely enjoyed this. Best of luck in the contest. Liz
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Nov 17 05, 16:54
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Hi Eric,
I love the juxtaposed images and I am left with a wonderful feeling of meditative calm from this. As usual, the form is effortlessly invisible.
Fran
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Nov 18 05, 10:51
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Hi Merlin ! :sun:
Beautiful imagery in a deftly written Christmas poem. I love it ! I too admire the contrast between city and country, the idea of the cowboy warming his hands by the fire, after his chores are done, is wonderful. Great rhyming form, too.
Great ! Sylvia :dove:
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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Dec 4 05, 08:12
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Congratulations! :blueorn: This submission has been nominated as a finalist in the Second Annual Mosaic Musings Holiday Classic! Best of luck! :holly:
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Dec 5 05, 08:28
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Congratulations Merlin! And good luck as the final votes come in ... :snowflake:
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Dec 5 05, 13:17
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Congrats Merline! Bravo! Good luck in the finals!
Hugs, B.
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Dec 6 05, 11:30
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A beautiful poem, Eric. Best of luck in the final round ! Marcia
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"...We are born into the world like a blank canvas and every person that crosses our path takes up the brush and makes their mark upon our surface. So it is that we develop. But we must realize there comes a day that we must take up the brush and finish the work. For only we can determine if we are to be just another painting or a masterpiece..." 1981 Javan (from the book " Meet Me Halfway" ) MM Award Winner
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Dec 6 05, 12:51
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Good luck, Merlin !! :snowflake: :xmas:
As I said before, it's a great poem, and I wish you lots of luck in the final voting !!
Best, Sylvia :dove:
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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Dec 19 05, 20:36
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Thank you for your finalist submission Eric.
Although your tile did not win, we congratulate you for bringing the spirit of the holidays to all.
:dove:
Happiest of holidays to you and yours!
~Cleo :xmas:
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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