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Sep 23 17, 08:24
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Haha!! Thanks Larry! I fixed it.
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Sep 24 17, 08:24
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Hi Lori,
I see you took my Nonet advice and fixed yours. Looks great now!
Larry
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Sep 28 17, 11:11
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... taking the ends of both of your original pieces: shun correct suggestions and syllables can get out of sorts because they lose focus and you cannot count on them because they don't pay attention to their contractional requirements
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Sep 29 17, 20:28
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mimosa is a total tree
mint into my tea pot orchestrates a symphony of real additives which may treat indigestion if you pour some of it in a glass for me as I relax in the back yard’s shade
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Sep 30 17, 09:05
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shade your eyes from the light when driving east right around sunrise or you may meet traffic that comes the other way; they have no trouble seeing you but your seeing them could be too late
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Oct 3 17, 13:35
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laughs are ephemeral
late asleep, unknown sigh gets you awake; hearing what you dream starts you thinking of some apparitions you might fear, relaxing with chuckles and a euphoria when they are not real
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Oct 3 17, 14:47
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RIGHTEOUS LINGERING
real if I go on in high-minded hug testing my entrance enchanted by all her ominous beauty that I undulate in while I hang on standing here aghast before leaving
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Oct 4 17, 21:40
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lower your eyes and go
leave or stay when you see excellent forms, read each area; you’ll find poetry can occupy the writer’s mind unless it is closed so please bring respect and critique for those who do
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Oct 7 17, 19:40
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do re me fa sol la is three quarters of the common scale but you can't weigh yourself on it nor find how much meat makes up your order's desired weight so I'm not sure what value it has
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Oct 8 17, 16:24
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honing our skill sets
has our work nuclei inspired no call- nurturing appeal, giving some impetus or are we just biding our time until others come and we test resultant offerings for ourselves
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Oct 12 17, 15:14
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shelves collapse with too much wait for others so we'll just jot down whatever comes to mind even though onlookers doubt we have one with any substance other than soot and burnt candle whacks
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Oct 15 17, 06:56
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wished for substance
whacks in lieu, since a club has its uses, exacts punishment dealt for criteria; fortunately no one can organize that and each critic reading our work must light a candle
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Oct 19 17, 12:36
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dull candles make a light that is enough for computer keys to be seen so fingers end up in the write places for us to tap out a few lines not disestablishmentarian
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Oct 20 17, 21:10
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attacking new church
an ti dote to swallow avoids gastric cramps or a sure death keeping someone like you in good health so we can spar numerous times without panic, grabbing brains when isms make me twitch
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Oct 22 17, 07:53
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twitch his side to make him gallop faster so you can catch up with the other rider who wants to win the stallion that you are unwilling to lose because you raised it from a new colt
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Oct 23 17, 21:19
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carefully tying it up
colt acts by romping, I ease out the rein; for I am giving up enough rope so I leave some slack before the knot, letting him buck or play with you yet not so much he gives you the slip
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Oct 24 17, 09:29
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STEAMBOAT: PLY RIVERS
slip the coil easing my ancient river mover; you and I boat up and down the riv over deep waters that hide a rough bottom which we concur takes us to our profitable ports
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Oct 25 17, 10:28
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powered by something
ports off to west would claim every new slave rounded up and let each one go for some cash destined to reach Nairobi; but tribal warfare by blacks can yield racial memories of that gang
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Oct 27 17, 23:54
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GUNPOWDER GNAWS ON ME
gang up on no alpha person right now; our gunpowder is way down -- almost zero. Don't we have some other man energized against them -- some Tom, Dick or Harry who'll intimidate?
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Oct 30 17, 08:49
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driving is essential
date reveals interests via a ride in a nice sedan, noting to what extent girls used a good alibi in coming home to tell papa some innocent lie for curfews’ fail
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