Hi Antony,
I like your dreamy poem - a few suggestions between the lines.
Across the sea on my sail boat the wind [again] finds me stranded again,
Perhaps I'm being too logical here, but I think again sounds better at the end of the line
uncertainty always ends the same a silent [pray] prayer. I confess a dream of the Galilee as my preferred destination. The albatross asks why the pledge, even a rationale for breaking out of the storm. What is your faith ? is an answer really a cure ? A confession can be overstated yet it still touches the soul [all the same.] Is the last line really needed
Eira
Like the inclusion of the albatross
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