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Hello,

Xanadu has requested that Dichotomy Goes to The Races by wordfaery be nominated for it's originality of theme as well as it's economy of words in presenting a different slant on how we may or may not need the use of metaphor to present our message.


Dichotomy Goes to The Races


Thirty years from now
wheelchair bound, gnarly
howling scraps of heavy metal lyrics,
I won’t know I’m an essay topic.

So let me save you some trouble
forget what was said about that piece,
the one the academic egos analyzed.

The Fifth Race at Fort Erie is about
the fifth race at Fort Erie.

The horses, cheap claimers,
bony buck-shinned bays
distant cousins of the Barb, Arabian
and Turk foundation sires.

The noisy lady
peculiar yellow streaks in her white hair
with faded gingham dress,
takes the bus to the track
and only makes show bets.

The guy in the frayed brown suit
and undersized hairpiece
never looks up
from the Form until the final furlong.

Odd low-rollers hoping for a score –
exist at the Fort, Mountaineer, Santa Anita,
every race track. I intended to write about them
about manure smells and dime store cologne.
Choke down a boiled hotdog and
taste desperation in the coffee.

It’s not deep.
Don’t let them tell you differently.

There are no metaphors here.


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- Cleo_Serapis   May IBPC Nominations   May 16 08, 13:11
- - AMETHYST   I would like to nominate Ruminations by Jim Callag...   May 16 08, 17:33
- - AMETHYST   I would like to nominate John's GAME OVER for ...   May 16 08, 17:38
- - AMETHYST   I would like to nominate The Misting by Lori Kante...   May 16 08, 17:54
- - AMETHYST   I would like to nominate Melodies of Life by Eira ...   May 16 08, 18:01
- - AMETHYST   This is a marvelous poem. Lori's pen painted a...   May 16 08, 18:04
- - AMETHYST   I would like to nominate The Ballerina In Apartmen...   May 16 08, 18:12
- - Xanadu   WOW! Thank you so much Amethyst!! This...   May 16 08, 18:59
- - AMETHYST   Congratulations, and well deserved with that poem....   May 16 08, 19:02
- - Xanadu   Amethyst: I gleefully accept this nomination for ...   May 16 08, 19:08
- - AMETHYST   Hi Linda, The question regarding "Has this ...   May 16 08, 20:06
- - Cleo_Serapis   Thanks Liz. This is just a "fun" poem, ...   May 17 08, 08:57
- - Cleo_Serapis   Thanks Liz very much. I'm still working on s...   May 17 08, 09:11
- - Xanadu   Oh! I believe this will stand as is. The Ball...   May 17 08, 11:43
- - JLY   Liz, Thank you. Are you the original author of th...   May 17 08, 18:22
- - AMETHYST   Congratulations John On the nomination and good lu...   May 19 08, 19:12
- - Eisa   Hi Liz - thanks for this nomination. I am thrilled...   May 20 08, 06:00
- - AMETHYST   Congratuations on the IBPC Nominations and polllin...   May 31 08, 08:25
- - AMETHYST   Congratulations Snow, For the nominations and the ...   May 31 08, 08:26
- - AMETHYST   Congratulations Lori, Best WIshes in the IBPC Co...   May 31 08, 08:27

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