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post Oct 28 03, 10:17
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Dear Cleo

Ha, I have a problem : My haiku, while I hope funny, usually have a serious intent behind them. So do I post twice ?

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post Oct 28 03, 10:42
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QUOTE (Alan @ Oct. 28 2003, 10:17)
Dear Cleo

Ha, I have a problem : My haiku, while I hope funny, usually have a serious intent behind them. So do I post twice ?

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Sure - why not?  :cowboy:  :grinning:  :read:  :viking:


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post Oct 28 03, 11:20
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Having started writing Haiku, I now can't stop... help!!!



borne on the spindrift
a seagull feather takes flight
without its owner

footsteps skip lightly
child carrying a balloon
after the party

sepulchral ship's horn
attempting to pierce the fog
seeking safe harbour

laughing impishly
grand daughter tickles my cheek
with butterfly kiss

tipsy butterflies
dreamily drunk on pollen
all their curtailed lives

through the woodland trees
Snow Moon points bone-white fingers
at nodding snowdrops

the swing still moving
she has run away laughing
but she is still missed

soapy bubbles fly
puppy, tiring of the chase
flops down, falls asleep


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post Oct 28 03, 11:59
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Dear Grace

"I now can't stop... help!!!"

Answer : GOOD !

Out of these 8, there were only about 7 I liked. Some I even loved, they give such a concise pinpoint pen picture.

May I suggest ship's horn ? alliteration !

Grace has haiku bug :
she is occupied painting
pinpoint pen pictures .....

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post Oct 28 03, 12:37
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James,  thank you for the information.  I had no idea
of its origin.  You've taught me something today. dance.gif

Grace, your haiku are wonderful.  I especially like:


tipsy butterflies
dreamily drunk on pollen
all their curtailed lives

I find this one has great depth.

I dug up another one of mine.



Salmon fights current
Berries lead black bear to stream
Fated compulsions


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post Oct 28 03, 13:04
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Hello Michelle,

Such a wonderful mind picture.  I wish I was there with my camera. I am crazy about photographing wildife and this is the nearest I shall ever get to a grizzly. You have taken me right into this picture. Thank you  cloud9.gif

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post Oct 28 03, 13:10
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Hello Alan knight.gif

Thank you.  I never could distinguish between ship and boat. Certainly sounds much better now.

This is great fun. I'm sure some of these will lead on to poems, but I am having great fun writing them.

Thanks to you and Michelle for the encouragement.

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post Oct 28 03, 17:47
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Dear Grace

"I never could distinguish between ship and boat"

Nor can half the nation, there is a correspondence going on in the D Telegraph just now on this very point.

Bit like the Q "What's the difference between a dog and a flea ?" - "Well, a dog can have fleas, but ....." - generally, a ship can have boats .....



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post Oct 28 03, 16:14
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New pasture bride-way
600 foot mud puppies
from wetland to here.
 
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post Oct 28 03, 17:53
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Dear Brahms

Not being in the least a country boy, I have to ask

1.  what is a bride-way, or do you poss mean bridLe-way ?

2.  What's a mud puppy ?


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post Oct 28 03, 18:14
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Merging into HAIKU thread.....

Nicely done!
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Hey, Grace, you're a natural!  Sorry I'm so unnatural!  I guess that's why I created my own form, HeadCase Haiku!  Sorry, LorII for my cowpie-ing this thread... but looks like someone else just did too? oops.gif

casting rays of joy
sweet voice awakens day’s sun;
laughter lingers long


© Daniel J Ricketts 24 March 2003


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post Nov 2 03, 14:02
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WASTE, OR WAIST ?

Hallowe'en's over:
Trick is with leftover treats,
Wouldn't want to waist .....

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fall of dignity

trees refuse to leave;
they’ll cast costume to the wind,
stand stark, arms outstretched


© Daniel J Ricketts 03 Nov 2003


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fall beclouds

shadowing daylight,
then reigning o’er noon’s parade,
what be fall’s clouds? mist?

befogging our daze,
they loft, leave a cirrusly
cumulous affect

feigning memories
their wisp a ring in silence
as they diminish

leaving trees baring
shivering limbs with trunks packed,
but nowhere to go.


© Daniel J Ricketts 04 Oct 2003


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December roses
brave the kiss of falling snow
with  sweet submission



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QUOTE (Cybele @ Nov. 07 2003, 23:27)
December roses
brave the kiss of falling snow
with  sweet submission

Grace

My muse has twisted words again, Grace!

Quiet Resign

cold North Sea sailors
immerse themselves deeply in
covert sub mission


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Nice reading in here!  Read.gif

OK - I'll try one!

Whispers of the wind
waltz in perfect unison
with rhythmic motion.


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QUOTE
Whispers of the wind
waltz in perfect unison
with rhythmic motion.



Nice alliteration Lori, evoking the whoosh of the wind.


Aquilegias stand
like tall, elegant ladies
in smart, pink bonnets


This is fun!  :dance:  :dance:


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sign: Custard's Last Stand
ice cream drive-in furthest south
at the Jersey Shore

dance.gif sLightly askew, if you ask me, Daniel  sun.gif


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