Wow, Antony! This one holds a big punch. Powerful, indeed.
I'm not sure about the reference to stamping out fleas. Is that metaphorical? Nobody can stamp out fleas!
Anyway, perhaps you need a comma after fleas. And a full stop after destruction.
Do you mean this girl might self-harm by cutting her arms? And would you consider using a question mark after "linger"? Else, it needs a full stop and Cap the next line, methinks.
Dark expressions in good poetic style.
Syl
QUOTE (greenwich @ Oct 16 16, 15:12 )
I gaze at her watching the gallery,
admiring the Byzantine depictions
of death.
Her eyes give no further answers
but I know she despises fleas
her high heels cannot stamp them out.
She is parcel of her own impending destruction
How long before track marks
move from her driveway
to arm.
How long can her absolution linger
meanwhile her eyes follow the darkest spot
of the gallery.