[quote=harlequinneyes,Aug. 09 2003, 09:26]Harmonics
Just some words I had
stretched upon this stage
framed with softer sounds
and dancing through my memory
just like the rain
And in the glow
when the sun sings through
parting the sullen clouds
with a kiss that beckons you
come take my hand
Show me this
and then show me more
I once knew so much
but I was so older then
I'm almost young
And when we walk
and feel the day's embrace
I'll whisper your honey'ed name
and kiss away your fears
Here is my hand
Please don't run
unless you are with me
fly beyond the sky
through magic's harmony
I love you so
© Harlequinn Eyes
8/9/2003 [QUOTE][/quote]
Hello H~
I very much enjoyed your “harmonic” expression and love the smooth flow of your words. The only nit I have is to possibly add some punctuation for emphasis. Even without punctuation, I find this to be an intriguing piece. Nice to meet you, and thanks for sharing.
Lindi
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