Group: Centurion
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From: Australia
Member No.: 17
Real Name: John
Writer of: Poetry
Train Journey
No excitement— slow rotation… wheels slip brake shoes, dynamic motors grumble— pulse; carriages exhale in a rush of grit and dust. Un-tethered the silvered eel dissolves into the black-circle of enchantment— screaming with fright.
Within the train Sway— rattle— bounce. We sit Rae and me, knees barely apart— our thoughts blended silence.
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Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr.
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Referred By:Lori
An enchanting picture, John. I like it.
Not sure I understand one of the images, though... the silvered eel. I may need some help with that?
Group: Centurion
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Joined: 9-August 03
From: Australia
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Real Name: John
Writer of: Poetry
G'day Daniel.
Thank you for your comments--a reflection
silver eel...a silver bodied passenger train.
"me" passes the grammar test.
Regards,
John
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Arnfinn
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Group: Centurion
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From: Australia
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Real Name: John
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G'day R C
The subway, train stations, are full of action.
An easy subject to write about.
Thank you for your comments.
Regards,
John
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Referred By:Lori
Ah... NOW I see your silvered eel squirming along the tracks! Thanks.