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Aug 3 03, 10:06
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CINQUAIN: From the French, meaning "a grouping of five."
The Cinquain has five lines of two, four, six, eight, and two syllables, respectively, with a total syllabic count of 22.
The cinquain should have no more than two full sentences.
The Handbook of Poetic Forms suggests: Do not add words to fill out this form; write with feeling, but do not allow your writing to become cloyingly sweet; build toward a climax and put a surprise into your last two lines. Rather than parts of speech, be concerned with thoughts and images.
The cinquain came to popularity by Adelaide Crapsy, who devised the form back in the early 1900's. She was so influenced by the Japanese forms, tanka and haiku, that she developed her own poetic system which she then called cinquain.
The most famous of the few Crapsy cinquains from her The Complete Poems is:
TRIAD
These be Three silent things: The falling snow... the hour Before the dawn... the mouth of one Just dead.
Cinquains, though they have never become very popular, have always attracted a number of poets who are still developing the form.
Why not try your own here in this thread! Come on! We dare you! :p
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Aug 3 03, 11:09
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WITH WINGS HIS FATHER MADE USING FEATHERS AND WAX HE TOOK FLIGHT TOWARD THE SUNLIGHT. MELTED!
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Aug 3 03, 11:11
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Quote Cleo
Friendships: blossoming love, nurturing bonds to last lifetimes. Surround yourself with friends and grow.
A wonderful example of a cinquain, Lori ~ it truly holds the key to a happy life as well... with friends on line and off we are never alone!
We grow in spirit, mind and heart, when we sow seeds of trust...honesty and true worth ~ friendships!
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Aug 3 03, 10:33
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WELCOME TO THE CINQUAIN CHALLENGE, WHERE YOU CHALLENGE YOURSELF TO USE YOUR WORDS WISELY...
A CINQUAIN IS ONE OF THE POETIC FORMS THAT USES SET RULES.
THE RULES ARE: 5 LINES WITH A SET SYLLABLE COUNT. LINE 1: 2 SYLLABLES LINE 2: 4 SYLLABLES LINE 3: 6 SYLLABLES LINE 4: 8 SYLLABLES LINE 5: 2 SYLLABLES
ALTHOUGH YOU CAN BE AS CREATIVE AS YOU DESIRE...THERE ARE VARIATIONS ON SOME GUIDELINES.
YOUR ENDING LINE MIGHT BE A PLAY ON THE FIRST LINE TO SUM UP THE POEM. YOU MIGHT LIKE TO TRY IT USING A SET METER OR RHYME SCHEME. THERE ARE MANY WAYS TO GROW WITH CINQUAINS TO HELP YOU EXERCISE OTHER POETIC SKILLS AND TECHNIQUES. ENJOY YOUR FLIGHT AND PERHAPS WE MIGHT EVEN TOUCH THE SUN~
EXAMPLE:
WITH WINGS HIS FATHER MADE USING FEATHERS AND WAX HE TOOK FLIGHT TOWARD THE SUNLIGHT. MELTED!
OK THAT'S NOT TOO GOOD BUT GIVE IT A TRY:
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Aug 3 03, 10:40
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Thanks Amethyst! :)
I LOVE a challenge!
OK here goes:
Friendships: blossoming love, nurturing bonds to last lifetimes. Surround yourself with friends and grow.
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Aug 3 03, 11:02
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QUOTE Friendships: blossoming love, nurturing bonds to last lifetimes. Surround yourself with friends and grow.
A wonderful example of a cinquain, Lori ~ it truly holds the key to a happy life as well... with friends on line and off we are never alone!
We grow in spirit, mind and heart, when we sow seeds of trust...honesty and true worth ~ friendships!
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Aug 3 03, 10:12
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Rose Buds; petals unwrap frangrant bouquets of life revealing beautiful treasures within.
Angels; behest His love. Seldom seen, always felt, everlasting serenity. Guide us.
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Aug 3 03, 11:27
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Hi Liz...I know this is a pain and I'm working on a resolution...
BUT if you'd like to center your text...
Use < > and put the word center inside followed by the /center <> inside as well...
Cheers! Lori ??? ???
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Aug 3 03, 11:29
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QUOTE (AMETHYST @ Aug. 03 2003, 11:02) A wonderful example of a cinquain, Lori ~ it truly holds the key to a happy life as well... with friends on line and off we are never alone!
We grow in spirit, mind and heart, when we sow seeds of trust...honesty and true worth ~ friendships! Thanks Liz! :)
What an awesome response here you've posted as well! I love the theme here we've started in this thread thus far! :love:
Hugs..
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Aug 21 03, 05:20
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Daybreak. Wakens creatures to it's gleaming landscapes. Reminding us to find Beauty in all.
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Oct 16 03, 05:05
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to youse used ewes:
Two ewes commiserate about a bygone ram – on all the things he couldn’t give a dam.
© Daniel J Ricketts 14 Oct 2003
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Oct 16 03, 21:24
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Dear Daniel
Another derlicious joke from you, but not a cinquain !
Two ewes 2 commiserate 4 about bygone ram – 5 only - make it "about their bygone ram" ? on all the things he couldn’t give a dam.
Love Alan
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Oct 17 03, 11:01
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QUOTE (Alan @ Oct. 16 2003, 21:24) Dear Daniel
Another derlicious joke from you, but not a cinquain !
Two ewes 2 commiserate 4 about bygone ram – 5 only - make it "about their bygone ram" ? on all the things he couldn’t give a dam.
Love Alan Dear Alan,
Do please remember that this is an exercise forum, and in such a place we play with and experiment with the form. You'll easily see that my CINQUAIN simply fell victim to a typo. Kindly leave room for that, rather than declaring it not to BE a cinquain? Fair enough?
Ever seen a cinquain train. Why not write one beginning with the last two syllables of the last one posted. It's great practice.
Here is an example (including the correction of the typo):
Two ewes commiserate about a bygone ram – on all the things he couldn’t give a dam
© Daniel J Ricketts 14 Oct 2003
A dam ( Song says it’s so! ) cannot so long withstand against one optimistic ram Eye’m butt!
I’m but a silly bard who mayhaps should be barred from writing out his silliness like this.
Like this? Then add cinquain or even two or three: begin yours with the final word of mine.
© Daniel J Ricketts 16 Oct 2003
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Oct 17 03, 12:37
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Dear Daniel
Sorry, don't understand. What was the typo ?
I was, while admiring the content, pointing out that the one rule that exists for the cinquain, the 2,3,6,8,2, was breached. I also offered a solution which was very close to the one you took.
Didn't mean to "miff" you. Look at the total number of my posts on yours and you will see that I am a fervent admirer !
Love Alan
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Oct 25 03, 04:14
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Hey Daniel,
I miss your presence here. And you've left a dandy last line to start. lol
Ok, here goes,
Of mine and yours, the world turns blue with jealousy, for it offers nothing better than us.
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Oct 25 03, 05:54
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QUOTE (Alan @ Oct. 17 2003, 12:37) Dear Daniel
Sorry, don't understand. What was the typo ?
[ I'd simply left out the 'a' ! ]
I was, while admiring the content, pointing out that the one rule that exists for the cinquain, the 2,3,6,8,2, was breached. I also offered a solution which was very close to the one you took.
[ Now, Alan, see how easy it is to make a typo? I'm certainly not going to 'correct' you by telling you that your cinquain rules are wrong. You just nade a simple typo! I know that you meant 4, not 3 for the second line, right? *smile* ]
Didn't mean to "miff" you. [You didn't! I was just reminding you a courtesy, my friend. *smile* ] Look at the total number of my posts on yours and you will see that I am a fervent admirer !
[ I've been pressed for time of late and cannot be much in the critique forums as I'd like. I have so much to do in 'real life' before my December operation. I miss participating there! ]
Love Alan Blessings to ewe and Iore's *smile* deLightedly, Daniel
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Oct 25 03, 06:15
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QUOTE (Michelle @ Oct. 25 2003, 04:14) Hey Daniel,
I miss your presence here. And you've left a dandy last line to start. lol
[ Some lines are connected to sinkers! ]
Ok, here goes,
Of mine and yours, the world turns blue with jealousy, for it offers nothing better than us.
[ Your closer is a bit tough too! ]
Thunnus — takes a genus to scale off its meaning, but opens no can of worms — just tuna!
© Daniel J Ricketts 25 Oct 2003
sLightly fishy, Daniel
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Oct 25 03, 18:40
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Ahhh Daniel,
I knew you could do it! lol and with such ingenuity! (you must come from the Great NW - teehee)
Okay, I won't leave such a horrible last line this time.
Tuna? The cactus pear or albacore delight? A prickly touch or succulent sandwich?
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DINNER TIME
Sandwich course provides lunch. Then dinner's set for six, even though there are just the two of us .....
(based on an old Spike Milligan joke)
Alan McAlpine Douglas
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Oct 26 03, 15:28
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Hey, Alan! I've just composed this one to segue into the second one that I wanted to post here:
of us who might you think would be most difficult when all has been said and done to fathom Now for the second one:
fathom pro fun ditty with arms outstretched six feet and you’ll embrace hexameter I’mb tolled
© Daniel J Ricketts 26 Oct 2003
fadin' in de Light, Daniel
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