We Grieve En Masse, x10 Challenge - Revised 6/6/07 Options

[JLY]

1st Revision: 6/6/07

WE GRIEVE EN MASSE

We pray today for the fearless;
bugles' echoes solemnly flow
casting a faithful closing veil
with reverence, we now bestow.

Processions of grieving marchers
lay wreaths at every sacred tomb;
honors, mothers never envisioned
the day their child left the womb.

Many rally cries for retribution,
but who is the enemy we fight?
Power should never embolden us
to deny one's unalienable rights.

WE GRIEVE EN MASSE

We pray today for the unafraid;
solemn echoes of bugles' blows
cast their faithful closing veil
with reverence we only now bestow.

Processions of grieving marchers
lay wreaths at every sacred tomb,
accolades, mothers never envisioned
the day their prince left the womb.

Many of us rally the cry for retribution,
but who is the enemy we seek to fight?
May our children learn that other cultures
are also blessed with an inalienable right.

Words used (in order of appearance): pray, unafraid, echoes, bugle, faith, tombs, accolade, prince, learn, right

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi John.

What perfect timing and such a touching reflection on this Memorial Day holiday here in the states. I've made a few comments for you to take or toss as you see fit. I compliment you on musing this from the times ten challenge for the week. Bravo!

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We pray today for the unafraid;
solemn echoes of bugles' blows
cast their faithful closing veil
with reverence we only now bestow.
Option: with reverence we seldom bestow.

Processions of grieving marchers
lay wreaths at every sacred tomb{,}[;]
accolades, mothers never envisioned
the day their prince left the womb.
Very poignant thoughts here John.

Many {of us} rally the cry for retribution,
but who is the enemy we {seek to} fight?
May our children learn that other cultures
are also blessed with an inalienable right.
Suggested tossing a few words above to keep this stanza more in line with the others.

Enjoyed!
~Cleo