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Eyes Of Blue

JLY View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Jan 5 06, 15:45 Post #1
Ornate Oracle Group: Centurion Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr	EYES OF BLUE Discarding frivolous flings I mulled passionate desires, longing for perfect love to quell fervent fires. For most of my life I wanted only you; your captivating soul beneath eyes of blue. Auburn hair cascades over luscious lobes, gently veiling treats I wish to delicately probe. Well versed in romance, infused with tenderness, my soothing embrace will engulf your loveliness. Pairing lyrical serenades with brilliant bouquets, my heartfelt melodies forever flavor your days. ·············· Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner

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Cyn View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Jan 6 06, 00:46 Post #2
Creative Chieftain Group: Gold Member Posts: 883 Joined: 2-January 06 From: Washington State USA Member No.: 145 Writer of: Poetry	QUOTE(JLY @ Jan. 05 2006, 15:45) Only because I have to crit. (meter is not my forte) My suggestions are for how I hear the rhythm of this nice piece EYES OF BLUE Discarding frivolous flings I mulled passionate desires, longing for perfect love to quell my fervent fires. For the most partof my life I wanted only you; your captivating soul beneath your eyes of blue. Auburn hair cascades over luscious lobes, gently veiling treats I wish to softly probe. Well versed in true romance, infused with tenderness, my soothing soft embrace will engulf your loveliness. May lyrical serenades meet brilliant bold bouquets, and my heartfelt melodies forever paint your days. (only because I'm a painter and I needed a one syllable word) Feel free (of course) to take any or leave all Cyn ·············· Cynthia Neely MM Award Winner