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 Jun 10 05, 18:57
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 1,547 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Jeddah, Saudi Arabia Member No.: 13 Real Name: Daniah Writer of: Poetry  |
In your presence
my heart revolves; an excited twirl around your smile, your voice, and I bask in the smoldering heat that ebbs and flows in soporific tides of completion. Elated, I glow. Levitating in the aftermath of our every connection. In your abscence darkness falls. Its ebony fingers laced with silence drown me in spiralling emptiness. All joy dwindles, as I lie paralyzed, cold, barren in its wake. Tormented, I fall, engulfed by a painful gorge of doubt and confusion. ·······  ·······Happiness is a journey, not a destination.
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Jun 10 05, 19:22
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Dani.
 Wow! This is quite powerful! The opening: "soporific tides of completion" sings! :sings: :sings: I can sense the magic there...the elation as you say. Then it changes so.... that sadness - the emptiness when the realization hits when your loved one is ot with you. :( Very well stated piece Dani - I can feel the depths of emotion in this one.... HUGS Cleo :pharoah: ······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
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Siren Why It Hurts To Love You Jun 10 05, 18:57 
Siren Hey Lori,
Thanks for the praise... It's one o... Jun 10 05, 19:46 Cleo_Serapis Hi Dani! :wave:
I think it's because it co... Jun 10 05, 19:51 Siren Well That's what makes you an awesome site emp... Jun 10 05, 19:57 Nina Hi Dani
You describe so powerfully the dramatic c... Jun 11 05, 00:20 Toumai Dear Dani,
A wonderful contrast of the highs and ... Jun 11 05, 08:02 Siren Dear Nina,
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