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Nefertiti
post Mar 24 05, 21:30
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I wish I could have known you better.
I wish I could have loved you more.
I wish we'd had more time together
before you had to pass through Heaven's door.

And I wish you could have had more time.
I wish you could have had less pain.
I wish I could go back in time
to have the chance to be with you again.

But Heaven's a better place right now
because, Danielle, you're finally home.
Still, I find it hard to carry on
left here on earth - all  on my own.

Sometimes I'd like to think that God is mean
'cause things turned out the way they did.
But, in my heart, I know the blame's not His,
though the price you paid was too high for a kid.

But Heaven's a better place right now,
because, Danielle, you're finally home.
Still, I find it hard to carry on,
left here on earth -  all on my own.

And I wish I could have made you better.
I wish you'd never gotten sick at all.
I wish you hadn't missed out on your life -
to have to die so young's not logical.

But Heaven's a better place right now,
because, Danielle, you're finally home.
Still, I find it hard to carry on,
left here  on earth - all on my own.

Tomorrow will come,
so will the rain -
filled with sorrow,
filled with pain.
But some other day,
the sun will shine.
Then, all I'll remember
is that you were mine.

But Heaven's a better place right now,
because, Danielle, you're finally home.
Still, I find it hard to carry on,
left here on earth - all on my own.


http://www2.caringbridge.org/ca/danielleruef/






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Cleo_Serapis
post Mar 26 05, 17:00
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Real Name: Lori Kanter
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Hello Nefertiti!  wave.gif

Nefertiti resurrrected again!  dance.gif  

Beth - my sincere sympathies. Shock

Your emotion shines through in this heartfelt piece. The repetition reinforces the pain we all feel when a loved one passes on.

I especially like your refrain as it gives hope:

But Heaven's a better place right now,
because, Danielle, you're finally home.


Hugs to you Beth! GroupHug.gif
~Cleo






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