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 Jul 3 17, 17:35
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
I'll See You in My Dreams
When trees darken against the sky, she sometimes drifts through a chink in my dream wall, as if she had never slipped away. The memory ogre that nibbled away at her life – and mine - has vanished. She appears ageless, salt and pepper curls flicked back from slender forehead. I’m caressed by the lilt of her Welsh timbre, that transports me back to childhood, when we played eyelash butterflies and she sang Calon Lan to soothe me. Awake, melancholy ripples over me, for she has slithered back through the brickwork again. Yet her aura lingers through the day calming storms that drench me. ---------------------------------------------- Line1 was When trees blacken L9/10 was Welsh twang ·······  ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
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Jul 6 17, 15:44
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 Assyrian  Posts: 256 Joined: 2-November 15 From: Croydon, Surrey Member No.: 5,284 Real Name: Antony Glaser Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eira Rhaposdy |
Absolutely beautiful. The imagery and flow are perfect
Love chink in dream wall. This establishes the basis of the poem - weaving a dream ······· ·······Imagination fires the soul, resolution the longing.
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Eisa I'll See You in My Dreams ** Jul 3 17, 17:35 
RC James Eira - Very beautiful - I especially like the last... Jul 4 17, 02:31 
Eisa QUOTE (RC James @ Jul 4 17, 08:31 ) Eira ... Jul 4 17, 16:48 Ali zonak Hi Eira;
yes those early memories live on; one jus... Jul 4 17, 07:23 Eisa QUOTE (Ali zonak @ Jul 4 17, 13:23 ) Hi E... Jul 4 17, 16:56 greenwich Very descriptive and well recalled dedication to s... Jul 4 17, 09:53 Eisa QUOTE (greenwich @ Jul 4 17, 15:53 ) Very... Jul 4 17, 16:58 Eisa QUOTE (greenwich @ Jul 6 17, 21:44 ) Abso... Jul 28 17, 16:52 Psyche Hi Eira,
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