Flashbacks *** Options

[Eisa]

I've just found this in the archives and would like to do some revision.

Flashbacks

I saw your father last night

Two years have rolled by
since the phone tolled
delivering its terminal message.

This earthquake shook me
waves radiating
from my epicentre.

In a tremor of aftershock
I whispered to her
of his slipping away.

sorry to hear that
- she was distanced
from the devastation.

Aw… he looked so handsome

He wore a flat cap in winter
to warm his shiny pate,

Now, it rests at the back
of my reminiscence drawer
with her butterfly brooch
and snapshots of their life.

I scrutinize their wedding photo,
all eyes smiling, lips saying Cheese.
His dark waves were intact
… yes, he was handsome.

I think he might take me back

When their marriage fractured
a tug of war stretched me
until I split into pieces.
Although middle-aged, I was a child.

He embraced a new wife for twelve years,
Even if his life had extended,
he could not … would not
return to her yearning arms.

He gave me a beautiful brooch

Her smile was wide -
unaware the broken butterfly would
not settle on her breast again.

[RC James]

eisa - I find this very compelling, with som many specific details that illumine the caharacter. Well done, R

[Eisa]

eisa - I find this very compelling, with som many specific details that illumine the caharacter. Well done, R

Thanks Richard,

I don't think I'll change much here - I'm just thinking on it at the moment.

Eira