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 Dec 21 16, 15:42
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 Assyrian  Posts: 256 Joined: 2-November 15 From: Croydon, Surrey Member No.: 5,284 Real Name: Antony Glaser Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eira Rhaposdy  |
I laughed from the window ledge,
a wadling Puffin walking down the busy street, wings covering eyes. He was lost unless he had planned this a thousand times, to espy the vanquished, those universal global warmers - the tombstone sayers of Acacia Avenue. There's too much of the wrong traffic daily debating those diesel fumes. ·······  ·······Imagination fires the soul, resolution the longing.
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Jan 9 17, 00:10
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,021 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi Antony,
I laughed at the waddling puffin (with two d's, of course). But this is a serious issue. I like your poetic wording of it. Not sure where Acacia Avenue is, but never mind. The final lines are a protest; I agree with you. Good alliteration in the last line, with those 'd' words. Bring on some more! Syl  QUOTE (greenwich @ Dec 21 16, 17:42 )  I laughed from the window ledge, a wadling Puffin walking down the busy street, wings covering eyes. He was lost unless he had planned this a thousand times, to espy the vanquished, those universal global warmers - the tombstone sayers of Acacia Avenue. There's too much of the wrong traffic daily debating those diesel fumes. ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
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greenwich Puffins equating misery Dec 21 16, 15:42 
Eisa I enjoyed this Antony - just a few comments below.... Jan 4 17, 18:44 greenwich Thank you for the review and a happy New Year to a... Jan 6 17, 13:53 
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