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Dec 13 16, 16:22
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Nomad

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dibáá’ nishtj
A poem of us would begin without words dried for decades in the desert Each cracked rock, red bit of sand and petrified bone were laid as they were thought describing what they couldn't
That tiny wind polished stone there held volumes on a breath just behind your neck The flecks of bentonite shine a bit of your salt sun splayed from every ocean spray across the globe Sidewinder tracks smooth perfect curves as you move unknowingly across my mind
There is no water
Every plant and creature holds close the drops of life that are wholly in your being Cactus, gnarly and spined, bow and flower at your color's choice The versatile and cunning coyote roam without a desert master but their tails curl under for your whim
Wind is the sand's whisper chords reverberating within your chest Night descends with a dry silent chill holding still for life's reprieve and rejoice It is your day's last kiss before our eyes dream and dance
A Tiger Rattle's bite and the Bark scorpion's sting remind the living, in a pointed fervor that liveliness is the only deserving course for our veins
Brittlebush jot the landscape yellow calling me to pull them and get them out There is the Gambil's Quail, a Black Rail the Roadrunner, and Gilded Flicker grounded or flying they make the desert thrive with beauty and feather
And finally, standing firm centuries on end, the Joshua Tree Here, at its trunk, is a parchment scorched and split in two A poem is written on it.
"I am the desert, the living and worth within is you"
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Dec 16 16, 14:08
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Eira,
You went right to my heel, of us/for us/about us. I was also thinking "This poem would begin....". It might have been the title were it not for the Navajo words "I am thirst" and their spin off the "i am death" Bhagavad Gita reference. Needless to say, I have thought long and hard against what I wrote. I hate the first line but we live with ourselves, no? You've given me some needed support in fixing it.
"Wind is the sand's whisper chords reverberating within your chest"
Sand and vocal chords and breathing don't play well but that is the poem's point, to find something perfect where I least expected it.
"It really is so good to see you here again." - You have no idea I much I have missed it.
Syl,
Ha! Gambel's Quail. I spelled it wrong....:) Yes, in and around Arizona but the poem could have been the Sahara if it wanted to.
I think the poem is the fourth entity. There are more. The poem is the desert, who hid, desiccated for many years. I am thirst. To find the poem I had to go there believing it was the last place I should be, the last place I would find the living and worth within. The "you" throughout is my wife. I have been trying to write something worthy of my wife since we were kids. I don't know if this is it, but i think it is way beyond any to date. It started with a question, If she is water and I am thirst, where the heck are we?
Thank you for the warm welcome back and the kind review. For purposes here, you can say my "you" is the poetry board too.
mt
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Dec 19 16, 01:21
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QUOTE (mt2polar @ Dec 16 16, 16:08 )  Eira,
You went right to my heel, of us/for us/about us. I was also thinking "This poem would begin....". It might have been the title were it not for the Navajo words "I am thirst" and their spin off the "i am death" Bhagavad Gita reference. Needless to say, I have thought long and hard against what I wrote. I hate the first line but we live with ourselves, no? You've given me some needed support in fixing it.
"Wind is the sand's whisper chords reverberating within your chest"
Sand and vocal chords and breathing don't play well but that is the poem's point, to find something perfect where I least expected it.
"It really is so good to see you here again." - You have no idea I much I have missed it.
Syl,
Ha! Gambel's Quail. I spelled it wrong....:) Yes, in and around Arizona but the poem could have been the Sahara if it wanted to.
I think the poem is the fourth entity. There are more. The poem is the desert, who hid, desiccated for many years. I am thirst. To find the poem I had to go there believing it was the last place I should be, the last place I would find the living and worth within. The "you" throughout is my wife. I have been trying to write something worthy of my wife since we were kids. I don't know if this is it, but i think it is way beyond any to date. It started with a question, If she is water and I am thirst, where the heck are we?
Thank you for the warm welcome back and the kind review. For purposes here, you can say my "you" is the poetry board too.
mt Hi again, mt2, Interesting answers you've given us. More than I expected. Yep, I supposed it could be any desert, such as the Sahara, but I picked Arizona as I've travelled through that amazing State many years ago. I cannot really describe the impression the landscape left on my mind. Too complicated. Enormous cacti, rough reddish hills with layers of centuries marked on them, vast desert for miles around... heat... a large, black spider crossing the highway and we didn't run over it ... so much!
In northern Argentina we have a vast desert called "El valle de la Luna" (Valley of the Moon). It also conceals myths and first dwellers' legends, and much more. By moonlight, it's extraordinary, due to its sifting dunes that point to its living, flowing qualities. Just don't get caught there when the Zonda winds blows! It's a hot wind that extends to other, green provinces and makes life uncomfortable.
Your wife must be delighted with this poem. Don't thirst and water combine well? So long as you don't swallow her up, all should be well. No droughts...
Syl
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mt2polar dibáá’ nishtj (I am thirst) *** Dec 13 16, 16:22 Eisa Hello Mt2,
It's good to see you here. I wish ... Dec 15 16, 19:26 Psyche Hello Michael,
So glad to have you posting again, ... Dec 15 16, 23:48  Eisa QUOTE (mt2polar @ Dec 16 16, 19:08 ) Eira... Jan 4 17, 18:59 RC James Eira - Survival is writtenall over this piece, wit... Jan 13 17, 21:30
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