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 Nov 28 16, 15:33
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 Assyrian  Posts: 256 Joined: 2-November 15 From: Croydon, Surrey Member No.: 5,284 Real Name: Antony Glaser Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Eira Rhaposdy  |
For a shared coffee
she'd seemingly be your confidante promising to dispel your woes. Her flashing green nail polish will lead you to reflection of a forests entrance unlike anything seen. Until your soul wades into a bag of pumpkin seeds. So much for empathy Perhaps this was her smile. Her own barbwire rouge. ·······  ·······Imagination fires the soul, resolution the longing.
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Nov 28 16, 16:37
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,714 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi Antony,
Good one, Antony, but I have to admit that I don't get the part about pumpkin seeds. This is about being trashed by some girl, as the title shows. It makes me smile, because I myself put crushed pumpkin seeds in home-made fruit juices, along with quite a lot of other seeds. Still, your poem has nice flow and can be understood despite my small nit. Thanks for sharing, Syl 
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greenwich The kiss off Nov 28 16, 15:33 
greenwich Imagine wading through a packet of pumpkin seeds. ... Nov 29 16, 12:23 
Psyche OMG, Antony, wading thru' pumpkin seeds seems ... Dec 4 16, 00:52 Eisa A powerful lady indeed !
I really love pumpk... Dec 7 16, 17:32 Ali zonak Hi, Greenwich,
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