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 Jun 25 14, 01:28
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,021 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting  |
Snowflakes float in all directions:
fragile, hapless crystals borne by chancy breezes less stable than the heart in bloom. Giddy water molecules transformed into asymmetrical hexagons, ascending, not descending, flippant towards Chaos' rules. One heart beats erratically, attuned to nature’s dance from a lofty metal bed. Quilted and pillowed, eyes open and close, gaze at gauzy air. Heart is not hampered by diffident frozen droplets, a myriad of them tracing patterns on steamy window panes, cautioning shaded, languid eyes. Soothing waterless tears shed by banished hearts on white cotton robes in harsh winter clime… Will snow keep this heart cozy, under a geometric patchwork stitched by chuckling old ladies? God’s creatures slumber beneath snow’s warm coverlet. By Psyche Changes: 'gazing' to 'gaze', S3 'exilic' to 'banished', S5 Thank you, Jerry. 'lie dormant' to 'slumber', S6 Dropped lines after "clime" to make new S. Tx Snow! © Sylvia Evelyn, Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia, 2014. Note: Southern Hemisphere, Winter Solstice on June 21st. ·······  ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
  
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Aug 27 14, 03:03
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 Babylonian  Posts: 89 Joined: 26-August 08 From: Hawaii, USA Member No.: 531 Real Name: Suzanne Delaney Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Alan McAlpine Douglas |
Hello Syl:
I m so happy to find you still writing...I was going through some of my old poetry files and found a foavorite that you wrote quite a few years back " Child of Patagonia" I am sorry to see from your writing yhat you are going through a difficult time. Your writing is beautiful in the way you weave nature to your experiences. Just wanting to say hello and good luck. Fond Alohas, Suzanne 
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An honest man alters his ideas to fit the truth. A dishonest man alters the truth to fit his ideas. MM Award Winner |
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Oct 23 14, 23:18
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 10,021 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hello Suzanne:
My goodness, somehow I missed this commentary by you, I do apologize.  Fancy finding that old poem of mine! I'd probably change a whole lot of stuff there. I've a habit of never being satisfied, so my files are fairly full of different versions of "unfinished poems". And now I'm making Spanish versions, as well!!  Yes, when I wrote this it was touch and go whether my husband would survive. He must have some amazing vital energy. The doctors can't understand, they've pronounced him "dead" many times, to the extent that my daughter even got in touch with a funeral parlor. This may sound like black humor, but it's true. He goes into a coma, barely a heartbeat or pulse...and then pops back! It's been nearly 15 years now. He's mentally ill and has serious heart trouble. He's now in a good Hospice. Thank you for your kind thoughts, glad you like my poetry!  As MM is very slow, I haven't looked around to see whether you've posted a poem. Hope so! Fond Alohas to you, as well. Syl***  QUOTE (pixordia @ Aug 27 14, 06:03 )  Hello Syl: I m so happy to find you still writing...I was going through some of my old poetry files and found a foavorite that you wrote quite a few years back " Child of Patagonia" I am sorry to see from your writing yhat you are going through a difficult time. Your writing is beautiful in the way you weave nature to your experiences. Just wanting to say hello and good luck. Fond Alohas, Suzanne ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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Psyche Warm Coverlet *** Jun 25 14, 01:28 
jerryk Hi Sylvia;
first off, I like your poem very much; ... Jun 25 14, 07:14 Psyche Dear me, my good friend Jerry, I'm finding it ... Jul 6 14, 22:54 Psyche Thank you, Jerry, for your suggestions. I've u... Jul 20 14, 23:56 Arnfinn G'day Sylv,
My observation I see comfortable ... Aug 13 14, 07:25 
Psyche Hello John,
Great to see you posting again in the... Aug 14 14, 23:15 Eisa Hi Syl,
I'm sorry I've not commented on t... Aug 26 14, 13:55 Psyche Hi Eira, again!
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