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 Mar 20 14, 13:22
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 Nomad  Posts: 25 Joined: 9-May 09 Member No.: 793 Real Name: Jeanne Fiedler Writer of: Poetry Referred By:web  |
The birth of spring
a renaissance of new life patterns beginning again as intoxicating scents of blossoms and greenery or a soft tear of a raindrop on a petal We slow down and let our relaxation spin us around a little carefree and innocent childlike - we discover anew the water adrift - our bodies serene We are full of creativity and dream of romance Songs of the breeze a white cottage where our spirits reside We relive this vibration year after year each time a fresh new outlook where dew leaves its impression on our minds - a new start - the beginning of a new adventure |
  
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Aug 14 14, 23:40
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,021 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Hi Jeanne,  This is a lovely, radiant poem about the coming of Spring. We all seem to be in different latitudes. I'm in the middle of winter, though not a particularly snowy one. I loved the snow when it did fall! Hoping for some more, as it's far too mild now.  I think you've revised your poem very well. Eisa always gives good advice, I'm so glad she's dropped in again!  Congrats, Jeanne, bring on some more!  Sylvia*** ·······  ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
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jeannefiedler Bliss *** Mar 20 14, 13:22 
Maggie Beautiful poem, Jeanne. Spring has been written a... Mar 20 14, 15:24 Maureen Enjoyed the read of your lovely poem Jeanne - diff... Apr 12 14, 19:55 Eisa Hi Jeanne, I love seasonal poems and as it is spri... Apr 19 14, 14:02 jeannefiedler I completed a new revision. Thanks for the critiqu... May 2 14, 05:22 Arnfinn I do not know what the fuss is about.
Spring has ... Aug 13 14, 07:32 
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