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 May 2 14, 00:52
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,025 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting  |
Signs When we were brash of heart and full of play, embracing by the lake, svelte swans glided close to shore. Sensual scenes confided in earthy words, with kinky toys held sway - Myth’s lovers shrugged off portents of bleak fate: Leda’s raunchy trysts with Swan’s beak untrue! We missed the relished lane that leads anew to fancied nuptial chains we claimed could wait. Today I brawl beside the loathsome lake and trace a humbled heart with bloodstone dew on mirrored heavens… - entranced, hope renews, but drifts embodied in the knave swans’ wake. Old sylphine chants inform my soul that you in faith will not reverse my contrite state. By Psyche Copyright: Sylvia Evelyn, Bariloche, Argentina, 2014. www.commons.wikimedia.org File:Copy of 'Leda and the Swan', Leonardo da Vinci.
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Jun 17 14, 07:55
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 783 Joined: 24-July 07 From: South Africa Member No.: 457 Real Name: Walter Schwim Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Mistral |
Hi Syl
How wonderful that you wrote a Sonnet! And a beautiful one too. See you can do the form stuff if you choose to. I'm not going to crit as I think Jerry has already done a fine job and I mostly agree with his comments. Suffice it to say it reads grandly and is steeped in sufficient shrouded metaphore to satisfy a king. Well done and lets see some more from that stable. Huz Wal ······· ······· |
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Psyche Signs *** May 2 14, 00:52 
jerryk QUOTE (Psyche @ May 1 14, 22:52 )
Signs ... May 3 14, 08:05 
Psyche Hi Jerry!
Thanks so much for visiting and comm... May 4 14, 00:19 jerryk Hi Sylvia;
I'll need to return to your poem in... May 4 14, 09:04 Psyche Hi Jerry!
I'm trying to catch up on commen... Jun 25 14, 23:07 jerryk Hi again, Sylvia;
I have dabbled in the 3 major so... May 4 14, 13:26 Eisa Hi Syl
How lovely to read a sonnet from you - I h... May 5 14, 17:04 Psyche Hi Wally!
I'm back...I think!
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