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 Oct 19 13, 23:58
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,013 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting  |
 I love you in your ludicrous underwear, diapers and socks notwithstanding; half-moon specs awry on the tip of your nose, add just the right touch to that bib with blue bears in rows. I love your mortal guise -or the Prince in a Beast’s disguise- and wince with compassion for my elderly nurseling. Perhaps each Rose that turned to gall blossomed from a paradox of parts. Crimson petals ....... soft as Indian silk ..............fade .....................and dart away… Beauty also unrobed the Beast. The charm was broken and a handsome Prince stood before her. Except, you’re a clumsy prince ....... who subsists ..............only .....................in my desolate heart. © Sylvia Evelyn, Buenos Aires, Argentina. 2013 Note: Changed lonesome to desolate in last line. ·······  ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
  
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Feb 23 14, 14:28
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 Greek  Posts: 743 Joined: 3-February 09 From: Abingdon, Oxfordshire,UK Member No.: 754 Real Name: Leonora Wyatt Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:No one at all |
Dear Syl, - I came late to this feast of a poem - Others have already said how outstanding it is, but I would like to testify to its emotional truth and strength - they shine through. We, both of us, perceive, and then seek to love 'our princes' under the evil spell cast by this disease.
Thank you for this expression of ongoing love. Hugs, Leo ······· ······· |
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Feb 26 14, 16:43
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 10,013 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
Oh my, Leo, true love is a wonderful thing, but how it makes one suffer when 'evil spells' are cast on us. However much we hug and kiss our frogs...LOL...they'll never revert to true princes...only in our hearts.
And now the bad news is that Carlos had a fall last week, though fortunately did not break any bones, such as his hip. Nonetheless, it's been a setback. At the moment, he's forgotten how to use his cutlery, which he was managing very well. He's still delighted to see me and eat the goodies I take him, but he soon begins to ramble and lose touch with reality. He was doing so well!! But this is a poetry forum. I'll stop here. Many thanks for your comments. And I hope to see some more of your own poetry soon. Yep! Hugs, Syl***  QUOTE (Sekhmet @ Feb 23 14, 16:28 )  Dear Syl, - I came late to this feast of a poem - Others have already said how outstanding it is, but I would like to testify to its emotional truth and strength - they shine through. We, both of us, perceive, and then seek to love 'our princes' under the evil spell cast by this disease.
Thank you for this expression of ongoing love. Hugs, Leo ······· ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner |
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Psyche Prince in Disguise Oct 19 13, 23:58 
saore QUOTE Perhaps
each Rose that turned to gall
blos... Oct 20 13, 10:36 
Psyche Thank you very much, Sergio, for your encouraging ... Oct 27 13, 01:22 Eisa A tremendously moving poem, Syl, which stirred up ... Oct 22 13, 17:13 Psyche Thank you, Eisa. I think I was feeling emotional a... Oct 27 13, 01:38 Cleo_Serapis Hi Sylvia,
A moving poem with just the right touc... Oct 27 13, 09:40 Psyche Thank you so much, Lori, for the nom. I don't ... Oct 28 13, 00:04 Cleo_Serapis Hi Sylvia,
YAY! Glad you approve the nod... Oct 28 13, 05:44 saore The more I read this one the more it draws me in. ... Oct 27 13, 15:14 Psyche Thanks again, Sergio. You lift my spirits.
I love... Oct 28 13, 00:06 Eisa Hi Syl
I am so pleased this has been nominated. I... Oct 28 13, 18:02 Psyche Thanks so much, Lori and Eisa, for your help!
... Oct 30 13, 02:27 Cleo_Serapis Hi Syl,
I won't send it in with the dots. I p... Oct 30 13, 06:22 Larry Hi Syl,
Don't get over here much but I'm ... Oct 30 13, 13:14 Psyche Hi Larry,
I'm delighted that you came over to ... Nov 3 13, 01:00 Cleo_Serapis Oh good catch Larry. Syl asked me to add that chan... Nov 1 13, 06:15 Eisa Hi Syl,
I came back to have another read of this ... Feb 26 14, 18:18 Psyche Thank you, Eira, for your good vibes, sent so long... Jun 4 14, 23:42 jerryk QUOTE (Psyche @ Oct 19 13, 21:58 )
I lo... Jun 5 14, 08:59 Psyche Hi Jerry!
It seems I missed this comment from... Jul 6 14, 23:31 Eisa Wow! Syl - Snow! Were just coming into sum... Jun 6 14, 14:59 Psyche Yes, it's strange now that I've moved furt... Jul 6 14, 23:09 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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