Heartbeats In The Sand - Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews

Heartbeats In The Sand, inspired by Pandora's duet challenge

JLY View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Feb 29 04, 10:44 Post #1
Ornate Oracle Group: Centurion Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr	HEARTBEATS IN THE SAND It is a quiet Sunday morning as I drive along the scenic causeway, searching for that one perfect point that will provide the most trenchant unobstructed view of the beach. As I reflect upon my lyrical dreams, the tranquility of the pounding waves renders unblemished images of peaceful seascape silhouettes. My cluttered consciousness brims with a spectrum of buoyant loving illusions kindled by two nomadic souls. On those deliciously distant balmy moonlit nights, our hearts rhythmically beat as one as we lay in the sand savoring starlight raptures. ·············· Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner

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Guest_blondie_*	Feb 29 04, 18:21 Post #2
Guest	Hi John. You've given me a lovely piece of poetry to reflect on this rainy afternoon! Thank you! I enjoyed your "daydream of the beach." Great descriptive detail! The only suggestion I have would be to change "is brimming" in L3 to "brims." ...OR change "renders" to "is rendering" in L2. My favorite line.... On those deliciously distant balmy moonlit nights, our hearts rhythmically beat as one as we lay in the sand savoring starlight raptures. (great allit throughout! ) Excellent job. :pharoah2 ~Amy~