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  Oct 21 10, 15:57
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox  |
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Kiss and Make-up I watched a make-over… Her eyes had left the cardboard cut-outs of her former self. Hunchbacked, in grey, she stood and waited for comment. The public guessed: at least a decade older. Her face and frame wrinkled on an ironing board. Facial massage, nourishing cream and colourful eye shadows, took old Frances, wrung her out, and spread her fresh appearance with full, ruby lips on the TV screen. A chic presenter draped a new wardrobe over her shoulders; hairdressers cut, coloured and shaped her exhausted hair. Emerging from the set, her family failed to recognize her. Copyright © Beverleigh Gail Annegarn, October 2010 Kiss and Make-up (new title) I watched a make-over… Her eyes had left the cardboard cut-outs of her former self. Hunchbacked, in grey, she stood and waited for comment. The public guessed: at least a decade older. Her face and frame wrinkled on an ironing board. Facial massage, nourishing cream and colourful eye shadows, took old Frances, wrung her out, and spread her fresh appearance with full, ruby lips on the TV screen. A chic presenter draped a new wardrobe over her shoulders; hairdressers cut, coloured and shaped her exhausted hair. Emerging from the set, her family failed to recognize her. Copyright © Beverleigh Gail Annegarn, October 2010 ·······  ······· |
  
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Oct 26 10, 11:27
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Bev,
You picked a theme that is very popular today. Every TV talk show is full of episodes of make-overs and the results are always astounding. A piece of good news, your poem doesn't need much of a make-over; you hit all the marks and created images that are easy to understand. A good read, something that some of us "mature" citizens here can identify with. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Oct 27 10, 00:27
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
QUOTE (JLY @ Oct 26 10, 18:27 )  Bev, You picked a theme that is very popular today. Every TV talk show is full of episodes of make-overs and the results are always astounding. A piece of good news, your poem doesn't need much of a make-over; you hit all the marks and created images that are easy to understand. A good read, something that some of us "mature" citizens here can identify with. JLY Hi JLY thanks for the comments and for the good news...! Bev ······· ······· |
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Peterpan Kiss and Make-up Oct 21 10, 15:57 
ohsteve Bev, Extreme make-over senior edition! eh... Oct 21 10, 19:34 Peterpan Thanks for dropping in Steve. Good to hear from yo... Oct 22 10, 02:29 Eisa Hi Bev
I really loved this one - it's so good... Oct 25 10, 14:06 Peterpan Hi Snow~ Thank you for stopping by! I agree wi... Oct 26 10, 01:59 
Psyche Hi Bev!
I've also been absent with family... Oct 26 10, 18:09 Peterpan QUOTE (Psyche @ Oct 27 10, 01:09 ) Hi Bev... Oct 27 10, 00:35 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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