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 Oct 17 10, 15:16
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
Son of a Preacher Man
My stomach somersaulted as we met where the brook tapered to a trickle. Fingers linked, we sauntered through tickling grass; he plucked me a daisy posy. Horse chestnut crowned the hillock; we sat beneath its canopy on a clover patch, the curved trunk our love-seat back. Steam trains hissed passed as we picnicked on cup cakes and ice cream soda. Sun blazed; the leafy drapes eclipsed our first kiss -- eyes open, lips closed, breaths held until breathless. In best lemon dress and cream straw hat, I sat beside him on dark oak on Sunday morning. He looked manly in grey suit with maroon tie, hair Brylcreemed back. His hand brushed mine -- he threw me a shy smile. I blushed, hoped no one noticed our heart-hidden romance. Granny might have guessed, hawk eyes always watching. We were love-bug bitten -- a ten year old school girl and Baptist Preacher’s son … three years my junior. ·······  ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
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Oct 18 10, 02:06
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 3,446 Joined: 16-October 06 From: UK Member No.: 298 Real Name: Alan McAlpine Douglas Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori/Eisa/loads of old friends |
Dear Eisa,
Totally captivating. The last line really threw me, and jarred everything else into place. Well done. The only possible nit : a ten year old school girl and Baptist Preacher’s son could be I a ten year old school girl and he the Baptist Preacher’s son Loved the "borrowed" title ! That's a trick I use often. Love Alan ······· ······· |
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Oct 20 10, 16:39
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Mosaic Master Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (Alan @ Oct 18 10, 08:06 )  Dear Eisa, Totally captivating. The last line really threw me, and jarred everything else into place. Well done. The only possible nit : a ten year old school girl and Baptist Preacher’s son could be I a ten year old school girl and he the Baptist Preacher’s son Loved the "borrowed" title ! That's a trick I use often. Love Alan Hi Alan This is a bit different to my usual - I wish I could think along these lines more often. Thanks for the suggestion for the final lines - I did have the same originally, but trimmed them back for conciseness. I'll think on that one. I was going to call it Preacher's Boy - then the words of the song suddenly cam to me! This is one I really enjoyed writing. Thanks for your comments. Love Snow  ······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
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Eisa Son of a Preacher Man Oct 17 10, 15:16 
Peterpan LOVE it!
Thank you for sharing it.
Hugs
Bev Oct 21 10, 12:16 Peterpan Is the song from the Tarantino movie??? Pulp Ficti... Oct 21 10, 16:07 ohsteve The only son of a preacher man.....yea I loved it ... Oct 21 10, 19:31 
Eisa QUOTE (ohsteve @ Oct 22 10, 01:31 ) The o... Oct 25 10, 14:10 Eisa Thanks Bev - I was thinking of the Dusty Springfie... Oct 25 10, 14:09 Psyche Lol, Eira, you had me in stitches towards the end... Oct 26 10, 18:20 Eisa QUOTE (Psyche @ Oct 27 10, 00:20 )
Lol,... Oct 27 10, 06:37 Psyche Hi Eira!
I'm glad to be back too, the day... Oct 27 10, 16:42 Eisa QUOTE (Psyche @ Oct 27 10, 22:42 ) Hi Ei... Oct 27 10, 18:02 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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