The View, Finally Something NEW Options

[AMETHYST]

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you haunt -
from shadows beyond,
that thick mist
where I lost you -

I walk along
cobblestone paths
toward the castle
you've prepared

cutting my way
through the fog
with the razor-sharp edge
of your memory.



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The View


you haunt
from shadows beyond,
that thick mist
where I lost you -

I walk
cobblestone paths
toward the castle
you've prepared

cutting my way
through the fog
with the razor-sharp edge
of your memory.

[AMETHYST]

Hi Snow,

Thank you!!! This actually stirred a bit from a photo set up as inspiration and I didn't even have to think about what to write, it just came. I have posted a thread in Karnak, with the same photo to use as a stirring. I want to talk to Lori about maybe I can post one a month, as a monthly picture inspiration thread, where members can post their poetic thoughts about the picture, sort of what we found at Malstrom ...

And perhaps it will get juices flowing and more poems posted in the critique forums to stir things up a little.

Now back to the poem at hand! LOL

Thank you for the wonderful compliments on this, it surprised me, after it flowed - that I liked it even the next day ... LOL I like your suggestion of 'I walk along' - and thinking on your thoughts about 'cut my way' being cliche, I might agree, at the very least, it isn't as strong as it could be and so I was thinking 'whittling' or slicing, or better still cleaving through the fog -

Yes, that title was a real quick placement cause I had no clue what to name it! LOL

Best wishes and big hugs, Liz