Upon the ebb of tide Options

[hellfire]

I seek
neither glory nor fame,
the ambitions of youth

In shipyards lay
long forgotten ships
painted with rust
and streaks
of seagull artistry

Their frames
are built
to carry heavy loads

[AMETHYST]

Hi James,

I liked this. I liked the essence of it, but unfortunately by poem's end I was a bit disappointed that it didn't take me anywhere. The ending didn't bring a revelation or an seen point of discovery or a connection to S1 where it offers an insight into the narrator and a sense of youth, and the shipyards and the ships. I could see a possibility that the final line, might compare the ability that both the "youth' and narrator have heavy loads to carry, and compare themselves to forgotten ships. If so, perhaps that can be made clearer. Otherwise, I enjoyed most of your images. I agree with Jim, that 'trademarks' is not the best word choice; however I thought seagull artistry was fresh. Again, if the word artistry connected with either stanza 1 or the final stanza about art in some way, It would empower it.

I seek
neither glory nor fame,
the trademarks of youth

In shipyards lay
long forgotten ships
painted with rust
and streaks
of seagull artistry

Their frames
are built
to carry heavy loads

Best Regards, Liz