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post Aug 25 10, 13:51
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Curvaceous as a writhing snake,
with Champs-Elys�es legs,
she never makes her old mistake
of courting mankind�s dregs
but always picks a chaperone
to match the limelight�s latest tone.

Her hair is always perfect now,
her clothes are custom made;
tight make-up shows designers how
to master nature�s shades;
the tints and textures round her eyes
are meant to tempt and tantalise.

She hasn�t always looked this good
for not so long ago
a skinny kid with attitude
frequented fashion shows
in Oxfam shoes and backcombed hair:
she�s lucky that I found her there.

Amendedments 5 September 2010
S3,l1 - 'didn't' changed to 'hasn't'
S3, l5 - 'worn down heels' changed to 'Oxfam shoes'
 
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AMETHYST
post Sep 5 10, 22:48
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Real Name: Elizabeth
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Referred By:Lori Kanter



Hey Jim...


I enjoyed another read of this piece and give a thumbs up! I see your intent with the tense purposes and to my ear, it reads like a dream!

Looking forward to your next masterpiece -

Hugs, Liz


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