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Upon the ebb of tide

hellfire View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Sep 1 10, 12:07 Post #1
Babylonian Group: Gold Member Posts: 66 Joined: 14-May 09 Member No.: 798 Real Name: James Carver Writer of: Poetry Referred By:poppy	I seek neither glory nor fame, the ambitions of youth In shipyards lay long forgotten ships painted with rust and streaks of seagull artistry Their frames are built to carry heavy loads

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Eisa View Member Profile Find Member's Posts	Sep 4 10, 06:54 Post #2
Mosaic Master Group: Praetorian Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori	Hi - just a thought in the last stanza : I seek neither glory nor fame, the trademarks of youth In shipyards lay long forgotten ships painted with rust and streaks of seagull artistry Their frames are built to carry heavy loads As St3 is written as a complete separate stanza then I feel 'are' before 'built' would help the flow. Snow ·············· Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way. Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner