Not Alone *** Revised, Villanelle Options

[Michelle]

Not Alone - Revised

My time is not my own
when siblings seek a hand.
I値l never be alone.

Our children always moan
for needs and wants expand;
my time is not my own.

My husband takes his throne,
his wish is my command:
I値l never be alone.

I use a soothing tone;
as Mother痴 wits disband.
My time is not my own

when friends decide to phone.
A party urged and planned:
I値l never be alone.


God痴 plan, once dim, now shown;
He gives where life demands.
My time is not my own--
I値l never be alone.




Not Alone

My time is not my own
when siblings seek a hand;
I値l never be alone.

The children always moan.
Their needs and wants expand.
My time is not my own.

My husband wears cologne;
we dance beside the band.
I値l never be alone.

I use a soothing tone
as Mother痴 wits disband.
My time is not my own.

When friends decide to phone
our barbeque is planned;
I値l never be alone.

His voice, once dim, has grown;
God speaks as life demands.
My time is not my own--
I値l never be alone.

[Eisa]

Hi Michelle

It is so good to see you back at MM (I haven't said this sooner as I've been in Seren's posting FV)

I've never tried a villanelle - I love the message in this one and it is generally well written. Unfortunately, I have arrived when most of what I would have said has already been said by Jim & Liz.

So, I'll just say congratulations on a great read ... and I look forward to any revisions you might make.

Snow