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 Assyrian  Posts: 262 Joined: 4-February 09 Member No.: 756 Real Name: Robin DeWalt Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Winning Writer's web site  |
I've never seen an angel's toe
laced in golden thong. But I have seen the devil's hand in every deed that's wrong. Where is the harp, the flute, and fife to play me through this silent life? If only God would breathe in me a deeper faith to set me free, I'd drop my burdens gratefully and walk the shores I cannot see. ·······  ······· |
  
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Jul 9 10, 14:24
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Robin,
I too thoroughly enjoyed this - and the question you pose: What if God were watching and listening and did something to change fate, even just in a teensy thing? I agree with Mary - that I think 'laced' has a better substitute out there. Either way, enjoyed the read! ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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merle Breathe In Me May 27 10, 05:08 
anaisa Hi merle,
This is really nice! Just a few sug... May 27 10, 10:26 ohsteve Robin, Welcome back,,,been long time no see. your ... May 27 10, 22:27 merle Hi Karen - Thank you so much for taking the time ... May 28 10, 00:31 Kimi Hi Robin,
This is beautiful. I love the message i... May 28 10, 01:40 anaisa and walk the shores I cannot see. ?? May 28 10, 15:02 Eisa Hi Robin
It is so good to read your work again. ... May 28 10, 15:30 merle Hi Kimi, Karen, and Snow -
Thank you all for your... May 28 10, 16:40 
Eisa QUOTE (merle @ May 28 10, 22:40 ) Hi Kimi... May 28 10, 19:06 Psyche Hi Robin!
This is so gently inspirational. It... May 28 10, 22:17 merle Hi Syl -
Thanks for stopping by regardless of the... May 31 10, 00:21 Mary Boren Hi Merle ... er, Robin?
We met briefly last year ... Jul 7 10, 16:52 merle Hi Mary,
Yes, by all means use my name...Robin. ... Jul 9 10, 15:36 merle Hi Cleo,
Thank you for the kind comments. I agre... Jul 9 10, 15:38 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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