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 Feb 17 10, 00:27
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Crayons Don't Cry
Colored smudges on the table top from the picture she drew, now hanging by alphabet magnets on our fridge. A typical drawing of a six year old; stick figures of mom and dad, her and baby sister. Yellow flowers in front of a red house, with a bee as big as a hummingbird. Our house isn't red... That's OK, I put smoke coming out the top, but we don't have a fireplace. Why do mommy and daddy have tears? 'Cause you're sad about nana dying. Why don't you have tears? 'Cause I know, she's in heaven. She went out to play, while thoughts of red houses, fireplaces and heaven soared with my afternoon tea. Feb. 17, 2010 © Steve Pray |
  
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Feb 18 10, 00:07
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 10,201 Joined: 27-August 04 From: Bariloche, Argentine Patagonia Member No.: 78 Real Name: Sylvia Evelyn Maclagan Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:David Ting |
OhSteve, I'm coming back here! You've made us all emotional with this lovely piece. It has a touching finale, just the right mood. My grandkids also call me Nana. I like that! I think I have some nits, but it's not the moment now, just wanted to join the admiring throng! Congrats, keep 'em coming! Syl*** ·······  ·······Mis temas favoritos
The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. "There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction." Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! MM Award Winner              |
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ohsteve Crayons Don't Cry Feb 17 10, 00:27 
Arnfinn G'day Steve.
You must enjoy, as I do, the tru... Feb 17 10, 03:56 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Steve,
Very touching poem!!! Bitt... Feb 17 10, 07:52 ohsteve Arnie/John what a wonderful thing to have happen, ... Feb 17 10, 18:54 ohsteve Peggy, I am glad the bittersweet came across, I wa... Feb 17 10, 18:59 Thoth Steve
This is such a beautiful and familiar sketc... Feb 18 10, 23:40 ohsteve Sylvia and Wally, I am very glad you both enjoyed,... Feb 22 10, 21:03 hellfire a truly endearing piece seen through the eyes and ... Feb 24 10, 10:20 ohsteve James, Thank you for reading and the kind words. A... Feb 24 10, 19:45 Kay Steve,
This poem is so original. It was a joy to r... Feb 25 10, 12:17 ohsteve Kay thank you for reading and for you comments, it... Feb 25 10, 23:21 Cleo_Serapis Hi Steve,
I enjoyed the simplicity of this one. T... Apr 8 10, 18:39 4rum Few can see with the purity of a six year old. The... Apr 11 10, 00:17 ohsteve Thank you Forum for reading and your kind words.
... Apr 11 10, 20:16 Peterpan Hi Steve~
I just love it!
Oh the trust and i... Apr 12 10, 04:10 anaisa Hi Steve,
This is really sweet- I loved it.
Grea... Jun 9 10, 00:07 Ephiny Hi Steve,
This is so beautiful and so absolutely ... Jun 9 10, 04:14 ohsteve Bev, Thanks for reading and your kind words, yes i... Jun 10 10, 22:46 ohsteve Karen, thanks for reading and for your kind words,... Jun 10 10, 22:52 
ohsteve Lucie. first welcome back to the MM fold glad to h... Jun 10 10, 22:55 1 User(s) are reading this topic (1 Guests and 0 Anonymous Users)
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