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Faithful Autumn (Final Draft . Thanks Wally, Merle & all )

Tomorrrow’s never certain.
It's always been that way,
but one thing I am sure of
is Autumn came today.

A nippy wind is blowing
the leaves from our oak tree,
and squirrels bury acorns;
that's how the fall should be.

Embracing as a sunset,
predictable as tide;
my faithful friend, Autumn,
has come back to abide.

Peggy Carpenter Harwood


Faithful Autumn (Revision 4- Much thanks Wally, merle & all)

Tomorrow’s never certain.
It's always been that way,
but one thing I am sure of
is Autumn came today.

A nippy wind is blowing
the leaves from our oak tree,
and squirrels bury acorns;
that's how the fall should be.

All things are set in order;
wild geese are on the wing.
There's comforting assurance
which returning seasons bring.

Embracing as a sunset,
encompassing as a tide;
my faithful friend, Autumn,
has come back to abide.

Peggy Carpenter Harwood



Faithful Autumn (Revision 3 Rough Final Stanza)

Tomorrow is never certain.
It's always been that way,
but one thing that I know,
Autumn came today.

A squirrel buried an acorn.
That's how it's meant to be,
and a nippy wind is blowing
leaves from the water oak tree.

Regular as the sunset,
faithful as the rising tide,
my old friend Autumn
has come to abide.

All things are in order.
Wild geese on the wing.
Autumn's comforting assurance
makes my very soul sing.



Faithful Autumn (Revision 2 Rough final stanza)

Tomorrow is never certain.
It's always been that way,
but one thing that I know
is Autumn came today.

Saw a squirrel bury an acorn.
That's how it's supposed to be,
and a nippy wind is blowing
branches on the water oak tree.

As regular as the sunset
and as faithful as rising tide
my old friend Autumn
has come to abide.

Now all things are in order.
Wild geese are on the wing.
Autumn's comforting assurance
makes my very soul sing.





Thank you merle for pointing me back to my own feelings about autumn, and thank you everyone for all the help!!! I just jotted down a very rough start for a poem with ballad rhyme which concentrates on the comfort and reassurance of a returning season.


Faithful Autumn (Revision 1)

Tomorrow is never certain.
It's always been that way,
but one thing that I know
is Autumn came today.

Saw a squirrel bury an acorn.
That's how it's supposed to be,
and a nippy wind is blowing
limbs of the water oak tree.

As regular as the sunset
and as faithful as rising tide
my old friend Autumn
has come to abide.

unfinished. . .




Autumn Images (Original)

A nippy chill flows on the breeze.
Squirrels bury acorns under trees.
Geese fly south through the sky.
Pumpkins ripen in fields nearby.

Leaves speckle woodlands red and gold.
Mums and pansies are being sold.
One's old jacket comes in handy.
Children's thoughts focus on candy.

First frost nips a summer flower.
Clocks fall back to gain an hour.
Thanksgiving is just beyond the bend.
Welcome, Autumn, my old friend!




Peggy Carpenter Harwood


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Hello,

I certainly don't mind adding a forum specifically for children's poems, as this is what you seek. I'll work on that for you all.

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- Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Faithful Autumn (Final Draft-Thanks Wally, merle & all)   Nov 17 09, 09:35
- - ohsteve   Peggy, I don't like to be negative, this reads...   Nov 17 09, 14:45
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Steve, While I value your opinion highly and v...   Nov 17 09, 17:17
- - ohsteve   Peggy, I did not mean to offend. If I did then I a...   Nov 17 09, 23:06
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Steve, No offense taken at all!!! ...   Nov 17 09, 23:13
- - Cleo_Serapis   Lovely, Peggy! I truly love Autumn - it's...   Nov 18 09, 06:33
- - Mary Boren   Hello Peggy, I don't think we've met. I ...   Nov 18 09, 10:06
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Mary, I've never met you before, so may I ...   Nov 18 09, 10:51
- - Sekhmet   Hello Peggy - I am afraid that I agree with Steve ...   Nov 18 09, 12:15
- - Mary Boren   QUOTE No, I don't need to be taught poetic dev...   Nov 18 09, 12:39
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi, Thank you so much for the time and attention...   Nov 18 09, 12:51
- - Psyche   Hi Peggy! I think this is a pretty piece and ...   Nov 19 09, 16:47
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Syl, It certainly is comforting and reassuring...   Nov 20 09, 07:13
- - Thoth   Hello Peggy, Nice to see you writing again. I hes...   Nov 20 09, 08:47
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Thanks so much Wally! No indeed to wonder, yo...   Nov 20 09, 09:09
- - Sekhmet   Good morning Peggy - I am not too certain why you ...   Nov 21 09, 04:45
- - Thoth   Dear Peggy, I love writing children's poems a...   Nov 21 09, 08:38
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Wally, This is my first attempt to publish a c...   Nov 21 09, 09:14
- - merle   Hi Peggy - I'm not going to re-hash what...   Nov 21 09, 22:13
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   HI merle, Good idea! I took a look at your ...   Nov 21 09, 22:56
- - Sekhmet   Good morning Mary - I think you are on to somethin...   Nov 22 09, 04:08
- - Thoth   Ah yes Peggy! I concur with Leo, your feelings...   Nov 22 09, 06:50
- - Mary Boren   Better. S2/L2, would you consider "meant ...   Nov 22 09, 08:10
- - merle   Hi Peggy - I like where you're going with thi...   Nov 22 09, 09:51
- - Thoth   Dear Peggy, I am going to look at metre for now s...   Nov 22 09, 10:09
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Dear folks, I've added a very tentative final...   Nov 22 09, 21:16
- - Sekhmet   Children's Verse Forum? Yeah! I would li...   Nov 23 09, 01:39
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Wally, A thunderous round of applause for a fi...   Nov 23 09, 08:26
- - Thoth   Peggy, I would put that last verse in position of ...   Nov 23 09, 10:36
- - Thoth   Just one last thing Peggy; S4, L3 - Count the s...   Nov 23 09, 14:21
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Wally, That's the line that bothers me too...   Nov 23 09, 15:15
- - merle   Hi Peggy - The end result is stunning! Congr...   Nov 23 09, 16:23
- - ohsteve   Peggy, I have been watching this from the first, a...   Nov 23 09, 17:25
- - Thoth   OK peggy, Lets see where the problem lies, The met...   Nov 23 09, 19:30
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi merle, Thank you for the accolade!! Y...   Nov 23 09, 19:50
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Steve, Thank you for following the thread and ...   Nov 23 09, 19:55
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Wally, Excellent analysis!!! You ...   Nov 23 09, 20:03
- - Psyche   Hi Peggy! I too want to congratulate you on t...   Nov 26 09, 15:54
- - Peggy Carpenter Harwood   Hi Syl, Thank you so much for reading, suggesting...   Nov 26 09, 16:22

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