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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
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Number of downloads: 6large eyes flutter among echinachea blooms - peacock butterfly ·······  ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 11,722 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Hello Snow,
Loved the picture and the haiku. I, too, have felt that the structure of 5-7-5 to be the criteria for a haiku but now, I have to admit I was dead wrong. At least as far as the syllable count is concerned. In tradational Haiku, the poem should have seventeen "morae" and that has absolutely nothing to do with "syllables". I have, over the years, written about 300 haiku and senyru and maintained that 5-7-5 structure in all of them. I WAS WRONG!!!!!!! (Sorry Steve.) Just a suggestion but as Lori mentioned, some juxtaposition is needed. Perhaps: Peacock butterfly echinachea in bloom large eyes flutter Take or toss! Oh, on the seasonal aspect of the haiku; the coneflower (echinacea) begins to bloom in late spring and that is also about the time the Peacock Butterflies emerge to feed. Again, loved it. Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner   |
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Eisa haiku Sep 16 09, 16:32 
ace Eisa:
Beautiful picture..beautiful lines.
O... Sep 16 09, 17:56 Cleo_Serapis Hi Snow,
Lovely picture is right! WOW!... Sep 17 09, 08:58 Cleo_Serapis I've also heard the syllables be referred to a... Sep 17 09, 15:10 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Snow,
I like the haiku, but don't particul... Sep 18 09, 07:51 Thoth Hi snow,
very inspiring, especially the photo... Sep 18 09, 08:39 ohsteve Snow very lovely picture and poem. I no longer bel... Sep 19 09, 20:12 
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