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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
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Number of downloads: 6large eyes flutter among echinachea blooms - peacock butterfly ·······  ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Snow,
Lovely picture is right!  WOW!!!!!  I'm not concerned about the number of beats per line however, I wonder if you can insert a season in the last line instead of telling us what the picture (already does) to an extent: peacock butterfly Can you relate the summer season instead somehow, with something we might envision while walking through the garden (as an idea) or a juxtaposition to those 'eyes'? Cheers ~Cleo 
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Eisa haiku Sep 16 09, 16:32 
ace Eisa:
Beautiful picture..beautiful lines.
O... Sep 16 09, 17:56 Larry Hello Snow,
Loved the picture and the haiku. I, ... Sep 17 09, 14:16 Cleo_Serapis I've also heard the syllables be referred to a... Sep 17 09, 15:10 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Snow,
I like the haiku, but don't particul... Sep 18 09, 07:51 Thoth Hi snow,
very inspiring, especially the photo... Sep 18 09, 08:39 ohsteve Snow very lovely picture and poem. I no longer bel... Sep 19 09, 20:12 
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