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[Guest_alice_*]

Harbour waters
I see me in my
daughters face


Alice44

[Eisa]

Harbour waters
I see me in my
daughters face


Alice44

I like this Alice. I still see my mothers face in me at times.

The 2nd line sounds a little awkward somehow.

I see me in my

Perhaps something like

harbour waters
I see my daughter's face
in my image

Snow

Ace - the recent way of thinking in haiku is not so much a balancing of numbers, but short/long/short lines, although the essence & conciceness is important too.