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 Jul 29 09, 05:12
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end of summer
in silence we share the last plum alice |
  
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Aug 1 09, 08:09
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hi Alice44,
 I enjoyed this haiku. I also don;t agree that they must confirm soley to the 5/7/5 traditinal rule of thumb. Might I suggest 2 offerings? Swap L1 and L3 and is there another way to phrase 'end of summer' without using the season word itself? end of summer in silence we share the last plum Enjoyed, ~Cleo 
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alice Haiku Jul 29 09, 05:12 
ace Alice:
Lovely image and a nice short poem. Wh... Jul 29 09, 17:44 hellfire hi alice
i think this piece speaks volumes with b... Jul 30 09, 07:32 alice Hi ace, thanks so much for reading and commenting ... Jul 30 09, 08:54 alice Hellfire, appreciate your comments. yes, I believe... Jul 30 09, 08:57 
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