Limerick Junction (Revision 5), limerick Options

[Maggie]

Limerick Junction (Revision 5 )

We're going to Limerick Junction
where poetry lost all compunction.
Such poems are crude
with language that's lewd.
Obscenity is their main function.

Peggy Carpenter Harwood

Limerick Junction (Revision 4)

We're going to Limerick Junction
where poetry lost all compunction.
Such poems are crude
with language that's lewd.
Obscene humor is their function.


Limerick Junction (Revision 3)

We're going to Limerick Junction
where poetry lost all compunction.
Such poems are crude
with language that's lewd.
Scandalous humor is their function.


Limerick Junction (Revision2)

We're going to Limerick Junction
where poetry lost all compunction.
Such poems are crude
with language that's lewd.
Sexual humor is their function.



Limerick Junction (Revision1)

We're going to Limerick Junction
where poetry lost all compunction.
Such poems are crude
with language that's lewd.
Bawdy humor is their function.

Peggy Carpenter Harwood

Limerick Junction

We're going to Limerick Junction
where poetry lost all compunction.
Such poems are crude
with much language lewd.
Bawdy humor is their function.

Peggy Carpenter Harwood

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Peggy,

What a fun limerick! I hope we never have to go to LJ!

My only nit is you closing line: it seems to be missing a beat and isn't quite as smooth to the ear as the rest of the poem:

Bawdy humor is their function

It's also your choice of the word 'Bawdy' - dum dum - combined with humor. The two words are opposing each other in the metrical category here.


Perhaps this might work as an alternate:
lecherous

or maybe swap humor with tomfoolery : lewd tomfoolery is their function.

Cheers
~Cleo